Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 concise reasons with linking words. Avoid grammatical errors and unnecessary words. For example, say you didn't choose it because it was difficult and seemed irrelevant to your goals.

例: I don’t like geography. When I was in secondary school I had the option to choose it, but I declined because I found it difficult and thought it wouldn’t be useful for my future career.

提案: Reduce hesitation and use linking words to contrast ideas. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific conditions when it is useful and when it is less relevant.

例: I think geography can be useful in some situations. For example, studying local geographical changes is important for urban planning, but it may be less relevant for careers like finance or laboratory science.

提案: Organize the answer: give a direct response, then offer a concise supporting detail with correct vocabulary. Avoid repeating filler words and complete your final point.

例: No, I have never formally studied geography. A friend who studied it for three years told me the subject covers many related fields, such as meteorology, which deals with weather, and physical landforms.

提案: Give a clear, concise reason and a brief supporting thought. Use correct verb forms and link ideas smoothly. One or two sentences are enough.

例: No, I don’t want to be a geography teacher because I don’t enjoy the subject. I think it’s better for someone who understands and enjoys geography to teach future students.

提案: Avoid absolute language and be more polite/nuanced. State your position clearly and give a reason or possible exception. Remove repeated words and fillers.

例: I probably won’t study the geography of other countries in depth because I’m focused on issues in my own country. However, I might learn basic facts if they become relevant to my work or travel.

× I need in my secondary free education I have a chance to choose geography, but I deny the chance because it's too difficult for me and it's not applicational to what I've learned to real life.

✓ I needed in my secondary free education to have a chance to choose geography, but I declined the chance because it was too difficult for me and it wasn't applicable to what I had learned in real life.

Problems: incorrect preposition use ('in my secondary free education' unclear), wrong verb forms and tense consistency. Correction uses 'needed' to match past context, 'to have a chance' and 'declined' (more natural than 'deny'), 'applicable to' instead of 'applicational to', and 'in real life' as the correct preposition. Also changed tenses to past ('was', 'had learned') to maintain consistency. Suggestion: Use clear prepositions like 'in' for education periods and 'in real life'; maintain tense consistency and choose accurate verbs (decline/accept).

× However, is not, uh, useful if you choose for another career like finance or science.

✓ However, it is not useful if you choose another career like finance or science.

Missing subject 'it' causes ungrammatical sentence (There be/subject omission). Also 'choose for another career' is incorrect preposition usage; should be 'choose another career'. Suggestion: Always include the subject 'it' after contrast words like 'however' and use 'choose' without 'for' when referring to selecting a career.

× I have never learned about geography at all.

✓ I have never studied geography at all.

While 'learned' is not strictly wrong, 'study' is more idiomatic when referring to taking a subject in school. The present perfect 'have never studied' is appropriate to indicate up to now. Suggestion: Use 'study' when talking about formal education and keep present perfect for experiences up to now.

× However, I have a friend who studied geography for three years. They told me about, umm, learning, uh, geography is not, uh, geography by itself, but uh, lots of friends included like meteorology, like the weather and.

✓ However, I have a friend who studied geography for three years. He/she told me that geography is not just geography by itself, but includes many fields like meteorology, which is about the weather.

Pronoun number mismatch: singular 'a friend' should use singular pronoun he/she rather than plural 'they'. Sentence fragments and awkward phrasing ('lots of friends included') are corrected to 'includes many fields'. Also added necessary connective 'that' and completed the clause. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to the noun and avoid fragments; use 'includes' to list related fields and finish clauses clearly.

× No, I do not want to be a geography teacher in the future because that's not something I enjoy to learn and that's not something I enjoy to teach at all.

✓ No, I do not want to be a geography teacher in the future because that's not something I enjoy learning, and it's not something I enjoy teaching at all.

Incorrect verb patterns: after 'enjoy' use gerund (-ing) not 'to' infinitive. Also simplified repetition and ensured subject-verb agreement with 'it's'. Suggestion: Use gerunds after verbs like 'enjoy' (enjoy learning/teaching). Keep parallel structure for clarity.

× And I believe it will be better for someone else who have a better understanding of geography and who is willing to take teach the next generation students.

✓ And I believe it will be better for someone else who has a better understanding of geography and who is willing to teach the next generation of students.

Pronoun/verb agreement: 'someone else' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. Also incorrect verb phrase 'take teach' fixed to 'teach', and added 'of' in 'next generation of students' for correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with singular/plural subjects and avoid duplicated verbs; use 'teach the next generation of students.'

× I don't think I will learn about geographies about another countries at all.

✓ I don't think I will learn about the geography of other countries at all.

Incorrect pluralization and preposition use: 'geographies about another countries' is ungrammatical. Use singular 'geography' for the field and 'the geography of other countries' with plural 'countries'. Suggestion: Use 'the geography of other countries' for correct noun-preposition order and agreement.

× I believe there's something for the student in their countries and and I will never learn about uh, geography in other countries because that's not my business.

✓ I believe there is something for students in their own countries, and I will never learn about geography in other countries because that's not my business.

Awkward phrasing and pronoun inconsistency: 'the student in their countries' mismatches singular/plural. Replaced with plural 'students' and 'their own countries' for clarity. Removed duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural forms and use 'their own' for clarity; avoid repeating conjunctions.