Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Use simple and correct sentences to express your opinion naturally.

例: I like geography because it helps me understand the features of our planet, such as mountains, rivers, and climate. I started learning it in primary school, and I find it interesting to know about different places and weather patterns.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and express them clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and focus on specific examples.

例: Yes, geography is very useful because it helps us read maps and find directions. Moreover, it allows us to understand weather patterns and predict climatic changes, which is important for daily life.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant words. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid filler words and unclear expressions.

例: Yes, I have learned geography at school and from my family. It is my favorite subject because it makes me curious about the world, different cultures, and the universe. Therefore, I believe it is important to study geography in school.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better linking words and more natural expressions. Also, try to expand your answer slightly with reasons.

例: No, I do not want to be a geography teacher because I am interested in the medical field. However, I think geography is a useful subject that helps us understand the world better.

提案: Your answer has good content but some words are unclear or incorrect. Use precise vocabulary and linking words to make your answer coherent and natural. Also, avoid filler sounds like 'uh'.

例: Yes, I will learn more about the geography of other countries. For example, I have studied the cultures and climates of the USA, Canada, and Australia in my textbooks. Knowing about other countries is important for understanding the world.

× Geography is a subject that learns from the primary school as by the children, so it is a subject that learns about our geographical features of our planet, climatic systems, etcetera.

✓ Geography is a subject that is learned from primary school by children, so it is a subject that teaches about the geographical features of our planet, climatic systems, etcetera.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'learns' for the subject 'Geography' which is inanimate and cannot learn; instead, it should be 'is learned' to indicate passive learning by children. Also, 'as by the children' is incorrect preposition usage; 'by children' is correct. The phrase 'learns about' should be 'teaches about' because geography as a subject provides knowledge, it does not learn.

× Geography is a subject that learns from the primary school as by the children, so it is a subject that learns about our geographical features of our planet, climatic systems, etcetera.

✓ Geography is a subject that is learned from primary school by children, so it is a subject that teaches about the geographical features of our planet, climatic systems, etcetera.

The phrase 'as by the children' is an incorrect use of prepositions. The correct preposition to indicate the agent in passive voice is 'by', so it should be 'by children'. Also, 'from the primary school' is better as 'from primary school' without 'the'.

× In almost nowadays we use geography for finding our maps, our directions, our climatic conditions, our weather perceptions and our predictions about our express condition is known by this geography.

✓ Nowadays, we use geography to find maps, directions, climatic conditions, weather patterns, and make predictions about weather conditions through geography.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect verb forms. 'In almost nowadays' is incorrect; 'Nowadays' suffices. 'Use geography for finding' should be 'use geography to find'. 'Our express condition is known by this geography' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it is corrected to 'make predictions about weather conditions through geography' to convey intended meaning clearly.

× Guess what I was saying this, I learned geography from my family is called AS and it is my favorite subject that gives me a mysterious UMM thinking about the subject and about this world, about the universe and the culture.

✓ Guess what I was saying, I learned geography from my family called AS, and it is my favorite subject that gives me mysterious thoughts about the subject, the world, the universe, and culture.

The phrase 'I was saying this' is awkward; 'I was saying' is sufficient. 'From my family is called AS' is incorrect; it should be 'from my family called AS'. 'Gives me a mysterious UMM thinking' is unclear and ungrammatical; corrected to 'gives me mysterious thoughts'. Also, 'about this world' is better as 'about the world'.

× Not like that I am interested in the provision of medical field.

✓ Not like that, I am interested in the medical field.

The phrase 'in the provision of medical field' is incorrect use of pronouns and articles. 'Provision' is unnecessary here. The correct phrase is 'interested in the medical field'.

× But geography is a useful subject that is relevant in our modern world.

✓ But geography is a useful subject that is relevant in our modern world.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses present tense appropriately to express a general truth.

× Ah, yes, of course in my textbooks I learned more about different countries, especially like USA or Canada, Australian cultures and uh, careless condition and the climatic conditions out there.

✓ Ah, yes, of course, in my textbooks I have learned more about different countries, especially the USA, Canada, Australian cultures, and the climate conditions out there.

The past tense 'learned' is acceptable but 'have learned' is better to indicate experience up to now. 'Especially like USA or Canada' is incorrect; 'especially the USA and Canada' is correct. 'Careless condition' is incorrect; likely intended 'climate conditions'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× It is really important to know about other countries in our life.

✓ It is really important to know about other countries in our lives.

The phrase 'in our life' is incorrect; the plural 'in our lives' is appropriate when referring to general human experience.