Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains some unclear phrases. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy and using correct vocabulary. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words.

例: I like geography because it helps me understand different countries, climates, and how our planet functions. For example, learning about various climates helps me appreciate environmental differences around the world.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Focus on delivering a clear and direct response with supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I think geography is very useful because it explains how natural processes like weather and earthquakes happen, which helps us understand the world better.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more formal language and adding a bit more detail to enrich the response.

例: Yes, I have studied geography since the second grade because it is a compulsory subject in my school curriculum.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions to convey your ideas.

例: No, I do not want to be a geography teacher because I am not interested in teaching. My career goals are different from that.

提案: Your answer is enthusiastic but has some hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas with linking words for clarity.

例: Certainly, I plan to learn more about the geography of other countries because I am interested in their cultures, climates, and natural features.

× I like geography subject because it is very useful for our life and it gains our knowledge such as planets, different countries and earth.

✓ I like the geography subject because it is very useful for our lives and it increases our knowledge about planets, different countries, and the Earth.

The phrase 'useful for our life' should be 'useful for our lives' to correctly refer to life in general. 'Gains our knowledge' is incorrect; the subject cannot gain knowledge, so 'increases our knowledge' is appropriate. Also, 'earth' should be capitalized as 'Earth' when referring to the planet.

× In addition to this, uh entity just sub about various climates.

✓ In addition to this, it also teaches about various climates.

The original sentence is unclear and contains nonsensical phrases like 'uh entity just sub.' The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence that fits the context.

× Apart from that it gives knowledge about how our planet works.

✓ Apart from that, it gives knowledge about how our planet works.

A comma is needed after 'Apart from that' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause.

× I believe geography is very fascinating subject and it is very useful for about life because it gives no it gives valuable knowledge such as it took gives about it is knowledge about how natural processes work and how planets work.

✓ I believe geography is a very fascinating subject and it is very useful for life because it gives valuable knowledge about how natural processes work and how planets function.

The sentence has multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'very fascinating subject'; 'useful for about life' should be 'useful for life'; redundant and confusing phrases like 'it gives no it gives' and 'it took gives about it is knowledge' are corrected to a clear expression. Also, 'how planets work' is better expressed as 'how planets function' for clarity.

× I learned this subject from second class 'cause it is compulsory subject in my school.

✓ I have learned this subject since second grade because it is a compulsory subject in my school.

The phrase 'from second class' is better expressed as 'since second grade' to indicate the starting point of learning. 'Cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. Also, 'compulsory subject' needs the article 'a' before it.

× No, I do not want to be your geography teacher because I'm not interested in teaching line.

✓ No, I do not want to be a geography teacher because I'm not interested in the teaching field.

'Your geography teacher' is incorrect unless referring to the examiner's teacher, which is unlikely. 'Teaching line' is an incorrect phrase; 'teaching field' or 'teaching profession' is appropriate.

× My aim goal is very different from this, so that's why I do not want to become a teacher of geography subject.

✓ My goal is very different from this, so that's why I do not want to become a geography teacher.

'Aim goal' is redundant; 'goal' suffices. 'Teacher of geography subject' is awkward; 'geography teacher' is the correct form.

× Oh certainly I will learn more regarding the geography of other countries be 'cause I'm I have keen interest to gain knowledge about different cultures and different nations and weather and more on.

✓ Oh, certainly I will learn more about the geography of other countries because I have a keen interest in gaining knowledge about different cultures, nations, weather, and more.

The phrase 'be 'cause I'm I have' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'because I have.' 'Keen interest to gain' should be 'keen interest in gaining.' Also, 'regarding' is better replaced with 'about' for naturalness. Commas are added for clarity.