Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'since'.

例: I like geography because my mother, who is a geography teacher, inspired me to love the subject since I was young. Also, as a political science major, I find geography very interesting.

提案: Improve clarity and coherence by using correct grammar and linking words. Be more specific and avoid vague phrases like 'That's all because of geography.'

例: Yes, I think geography is useful because it helps us understand why wars start between countries, often due to conflicts over natural resources or specific regions.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I have studied geography since I was young. Even now, I enjoy learning about geography and the capitals of different countries. I like this subject along with history.

提案: Try to give a more direct and structured answer. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: To be honest, becoming a geography teacher is not my main goal, but I like geography and enjoy explaining information to others. Since I also like teaching, I would consider it.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and correct grammar mistakes.

例: Yes, I will continue studying the geography of other countries because I enjoy it. It helps me understand the world and how countries relate to each other.

× she grows the love of the geography subject of me since I was young

✓ she has nurtured my love for the subject of geography since I was young

The phrase 'grows the love of the geography subject of me' is incorrect because 'grow' is not used with 'love' in this context and the prepositions are wrong. The correct expression is 'nurture love for' something. Also, 'since I was young' requires present perfect tense to indicate an action continuing from the past to present.

× And I like geography also be 'cause my major is political science so I'm interested in geography

✓ I also like geography because my major is political science, so I'm interested in it

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary here. 'Be 'cause' is a colloquial contraction and should be written as 'because'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; 'I also like geography because my major is political science, so I'm interested in it' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× it helps us to understand the how countries begin a war

✓ it helps us to understand how countries begin a war

The article 'the' before 'how' is incorrect because 'how' is an adverb introducing a clause and does not require an article.

× Sometimes war began between two countries or more because of natural resources or in a specific region

✓ Sometimes wars begin between two or more countries because of natural resources or in a specific region

The sentence mixes past tense 'began' with a general statement. Since this is a general truth, present tense 'begin' is appropriate. Also, 'war' should be plural 'wars' to match 'two or more countries'.

× I have studied geography and until now why I like to see geography and the capitals of any country to know their name

✓ I have studied geography, and until now, I like to look at geography and the capitals of any country to know their names

The phrase 'why I like to see geography' is unclear and incorrect. 'Look at geography' is better. Also, 'their name' should be 'their names' because 'capitals' is plural. Commas are added for clarity.

× I like this subject allowed besides history subject

✓ I like this subject a lot besides the history subject

'Allowed' is incorrect here; likely intended 'a lot'. Also, 'history subject' should be 'the history subject' or simply 'history'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× I like to explain information for any person

✓ I like to explain information to anyone

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'explain to' is the correct collocation. Also, 'any person' is better expressed as 'anyone'.

× it helps me to understand the world and to understand the how countries. Relat with each other

✓ it helps me to understand the world and how countries relate to each other

The phrase 'the how countries' is incorrect; 'how countries' is correct without 'the'. 'Relat' is a typo and should be 'relate'. Also, 'relate with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'relate to'.