Names— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence explaining the meaning, avoid filler words (uh) and unclear phrases. Use one or two supporting details explaining the origin and context. Correct grammar (e.g., “If any person does something related to a god or goddess, it is called Vidhi” is unclear; instead explain what ‘Vidhi’ refers to).

例: My name, Vidhi, means a religious or spiritual ritual. For example, in my culture ‘vidhi’ refers to formal rites performed during religious ceremonies, and my parents chose it because they are devout.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific explanation. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct word order. Avoid repeating words like ‘also’.

例: I would choose a name that matches my child’s Zodiac sign because that is an important tradition in my country. For example, I would pick a popular modern name that fits the Zodiac traits, so the name feels both meaningful and fashionable.

提案: Answer directly, then give a brief cultural reason with correct tense and clearer phrasing. Avoid long, clumsy clauses. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ to connect ideas.

例: No, I am the only person named Vidhi in my family. In fact, families here avoid repeating names for at least four or five generations because they respect elders and want each person to have a unique identity.

提案: Admit limited knowledge briefly, then compare your own culture clearly. Use correct comparative language and avoid vague phrases like ‘heavy and the large name’. Keep sentences concise and use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘nowadays’.

例: I’m not sure about Chinese naming practices, but in my country names used to be long and formal. However, nowadays parents prefer shorter, simpler names because they sound modern and are easier to use.

提案: Recognize you don’t know about China, then give a clear, well-structured example from your own country. Use proper plurals and remove filler words. Use linking words such as ‘for example’ and keep it to two or three sentences.

例: I’m not sure which names are popular in China, but in India names like Alia, Ritika and Ruchika are common. For example, some parents choose these names because they are fashionable and fit the child’s Zodiac sign.

× If uh, any person do anything related to board or uh, goddess, it calls the vidhi.

✓ If anyone does anything related to a ritual or a goddess, it is called vidhi.

The original sentence has incorrect verb form and subject-verb agreement. 'Any person do' should be 'anyone does' (third person singular). 'Board' is likely wrong word; 'ritual' fits the context. Also passive 'it calls the vidhi' is ungrammatical; use 'it is called vidhi'. Suggestion: use 'anyone does' for third person singular and use passive 'is called'.

× In my country people choose the name according to Zodiac sign and I choose the trending name which matches with the Zodiac sign also to my child.

✓ In my country, people choose names according to their Zodiac signs, and I would choose a trending name that also matches my child's Zodiac sign.

Tense and phrasing are inconsistent. Use plural 'names' and 'Zodiac signs' for general statements. 'I choose' should be conditional/future for a hypothetical next generation: 'I would choose'. 'Which matches with the Zodiac sign also to my child' is awkward; correct to 'that also matches my child's Zodiac sign'. Suggestions: use consistent plural nouns for general rules and conditional 'would' for hypothetical choices.

× No, I am the only one who has named Vidhi in my family and till the 4th or 5th generation we don't give the same name as a parent, as a relative or any older person name.

✓ No, I am the only one named Vidhi in my family, and up to the fourth or fifth generation we do not give the same name as a parent, relative, or older person.

Pronoun and phrasing errors: 'has named Vidhi' wrongly implies the speaker named someone; 'named Vidhi' is correct. 'Till the 4th or 5th generation' should be 'up to the fourth or fifth generation'. Use 'do not' instead of contraction for clarity. 'As a parent, as a relative or any older person name' is ungrammatical; use parallel nouns 'parent, relative, or older person'. Suggestions: use participle 'named' and clear parallel structure.

× I'm not aware about the Chinese people and Chinese name, but in my country people put the heavy and the large name in the past but nowadays the name are become the shorter and simple and sweet.

✓ I'm not familiar with Chinese people or Chinese names, but in my country people used to give long and elaborate names in the past; nowadays names have become shorter, simpler, and sweeter.

Incorrect prepositions and word choice: 'aware about' should be 'familiar with'. 'Chinese name' should be 'Chinese names'. 'Put the heavy and the large name' is incorrect; use 'give long and elaborate names'. 'Name are become' has subject-verb agreement and tense errors; use 'names have become'. Also use adjective order and commas: 'shorter, simpler, and sweeter'. Suggestions: use 'familiar with', 'used to give', and correct plural agreement.

× I don't know about the Chinese name but in India there are few name is like Alia, Ritika, Ruchika are the most popular uh among the people and according to Zodiac sign some person some parents put these names to their child.

✓ I don't know about Chinese names, but in India there are a few popular names like Alia, Ritika, and Ruchika, and some parents choose these names for their children according to the Zodiac sign.

Incorrect quantifier and number agreement: 'there are few name is like' should be 'there are a few popular names like'. Use plural 'names' and plural verb agreement. 'Some person some parents' is redundant; use 'some parents'. 'Put these names to their child' should be 'choose these names for their children'. Suggestions: use 'a few', plural forms, and 'choose for' when talking about naming children.