Names— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and vary sentence structures; correct small grammar issues and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly give two specific supporting details with linking words. Also replace vague phrases like “they had difficulty” with more natural phrasing.

例: Yes — my name is meaningful. It comes from my grandmother, Candelaria, whose Anglo employers couldn’t pronounce her full name, so they called her “Candy,” which became my first name. My middle name comes from my aunt Rosario, whose nickname is Rose.

提案: Make the timeline and tense consistent and add a linking word to show sequence. Avoid short generic phrases; give one specific reason why you liked the name and how you and your partner decided.

例: I would pick names based on personal preference and mutual agreement. For example, we named our son after a favorite game character because the name sounded strong and meaningful, and after discussing it together we both agreed it suited him.

提案: Good clarity and coherence; tighten phrasing and reduce redundancy. Use one linking phrase to add the personal feeling and avoid exaggerated wording like “in every way.”

例: No — my name is unique in my family. Unlike my siblings who have single names, I have a middle name, which makes me feel distinct and gives me a stronger personal identity.

提案: Correct grammar and improve cohesion: remove extraneous words and use linking phrases to compare past and present clearly. Provide one specific example of a traditional name vs a modern name for greater detail.

例: Yes — there are clear differences. In the past, parents chose names that reflected family heritage and virtues, such as “Jun” or “Mei.” Today, many choose shorter or Western-influenced names for uniqueness or ease of pronunciation, for example using “Liam” or “Maya.”

提案: Stay on-topic (the question asks about China but the answer mentions the Philippines), fix grammar, and give specific popular examples and a reason. Use linking words to show cause and effect and avoid repeated or mistaken words like “deflect reflect.”

例: Yes — popularity changes by generation. In China today some parents prefer shorter or Western-style names influenced by celebrities and TV shows; for example, names like “Leo” or “Emma” have become more common. This shift reflects parents’ desire for modern, internationally friendly names.

× She used to work for an American couple when she was young, and they had difficulty in pronouncing her name, so they gave her a nickname, which is my first name.

✓ She worked for an American couple when she was young, and they had difficulty pronouncing her name, so they gave her a nickname, which is my first name.

The phrase 'used to work' is acceptable but 'used to' plus 'when she was young' can be redundant; however the main issue is the unnecessary 'in' before 'pronouncing' which is incorrect. 'Difficulty in pronouncing' is less natural than 'difficulty pronouncing'. Use simple past 'worked' to match the past narrative; remove 'in' before the gerund for correct verb-preposition pattern. Suggestion: Use 'worked' or keep 'used to work' but ensure 'difficulty pronouncing' (no 'in').

× I would choose names based on personal preference.

✓ I would choose names based on personal preference.

No correction needed. The sentence correctly uses conditional 'would' to indicate hypothetical future choices and present-tense noun phrase. Included for completeness: it matches the modal conditional context and requires no grammatical change.

× For my son's name, I named him after my favorite character in a game.

✓ For my son's name, I would name him after my favorite character in a game.

The original uses past tense 'named' while the question asks about future choices; this creates a tense mismatch. Use conditional 'would name' to express a hypothetical future decision. Suggestion: match the conditional 'I would choose' used earlier.

× I discuss it with my partner and liked it too, so we proceeded with that name.

✓ I discussed it with my partner and he/she liked it too, so we proceeded with that name.

Tense and pronoun issues: 'discuss' should be past 'discussed' to match 'proceeded' and 'liked', and the pronoun 'liked it too' lacks a clear subject for the partner; include 'he/she' or 'they' to clarify. Also maintain consistent past tense. Suggestion: use consistent tense and explicit pronoun (or 'they' if gender-neutral).

× Most of my siblings have one name, and I am the only one who has a second name.

✓ Most of my siblings have one name, and I am the only one who have a second name.

This sentence actually contained a subject-verb agreement issue: 'I am the only one who has' is grammatical because 'who' refers to 'I' (singular) so 'has' is correct. On reflection, no plural correction needed. Keep original 'has'. Suggestion: No change needed; ensure 'who' agrees with antecedent.

× I enjoy having a name that stands out in every way as it allows me to have a distinct identity.

✓ I enjoy having a name that stands out in every way, as it allows me to have a distinct identity.

No tense error, but a missing comma before 'as' improves readability. The verbs are in present tense correctly expressing a general truth. Suggestion: add comma for clarity.

× In the past, names often reflect the traditional values and family heritage.

✓ In the past, names often reflected traditional values and family heritage.

Tense mismatch: 'In the past' requires past tense 'reflected' rather than present 'reflect'. Also remove 'the' before 'traditional values' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Match temporal adverbial with past tense verbs.

× Nowadays, modern names are more influenced by global trends and popular culture.

✓ Nowadays, modern names are more influenced by global trends and popular culture.

No correction needed. Present passive 'are influenced' correctly describes current, ongoing trend. Included for completeness.

× Parents they might choose names based on their meanings or uniqueness.

✓ Parents might choose names based on their meanings or uniqueness.

Redundant subject pronoun 'they' following 'Parents' creates an error. Remove 'they' to leave a single subject. Suggestion: Do not use both noun subject and pronoun subject together unless using a clause like 'Parents, they...,' which is informal and not appropriate here.

× And there's a trend towards shorter and simple names that are easier for English speakers to pronounce.

✓ And there's a trend towards shorter and simpler names that are easier for English speakers to pronounce.

Coordinate adjectives describing the same noun need parallel forms: 'shorter and simple' should be 'shorter and simpler' or 'short and simple'. Use comparative 'simpler' to match 'shorter'. Suggestion: Keep parallel adjective forms.

× In recent years, there has been a noticeable trend toward more unique or western sounding names in the Philippines.

✓ In recent years, there has been a noticeable trend toward more unique or western-sounding names in the Philippines.

Compound adjective 'western sounding' should be hyphenated 'western-sounding' when placed before a noun, and 'toward' vs 'towards' both acceptable; keep 'toward'. Also 'more unique' is arguable but acceptable informally. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives for clarity.

× Some parents are influenced by TV shows or series or celebrities when choosing names.

✓ Some parents are influenced by TV shows, series, or celebrities when choosing names.

Use commas to separate items in a list rather than repeated 'or'. Also 'TV shows or series' is redundant; 'TV shows or series' can be simplified to 'TV shows or celebrities'. Suggestion: Use parallel list structure and commas.

× The popularity of name tends to change with each generation as parents select names that deflect reflect modern values or aspirations.

✓ The popularity of names tends to change with each generation as parents select names that reflect modern values or aspirations.

Multiple issues: 'name' should be plural 'names' to agree with 'popularity of', and there is a duplicated word 'deflect reflect' — remove 'deflect' leaving 'reflect'. Suggestion: Use plural 'names' and correct verb 'reflect'.