Names— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence and then explain the meaning with specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My name is Kimberly, which means a leader. It refers to someone who guides others and stands up for them.

提案: Make your answer more structured by starting with a clear topic sentence. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect your ideas. Provide specific reasons for your choice to enrich your answer.

例: When choosing names for my children, I use a dictionary to find meaningful names. For example, my daughter's name, Amari, means 'God's gift from heaven,' which I find very special.

提案: Improve your grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases. Be more concise and natural in your response.

例: No, everyone in my family has a unique name with different meanings. Similarly, we all have distinct personalities as individuals.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'It's their option' and provide more specific details to support your answer.

例: Nowadays, Chinese parents choose more modern names for their children because they prefer not to repeat ancestral names. This reflects a shift in naming traditions over time.

提案: Make your answer more complete and natural by avoiding abrupt endings like 'And that's all.' Provide more examples or explanations and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, some names are more popular in China. For instance, 'Lao Lao' means 'to enlighten everyone' and is a traditional name with a positive meaning.

× It's a meaning is a leader means someone who will guide or be someone to stand for.

✓ It means a leader, someone who will guide or stand for others.

The original sentence has redundant and confusing structure. 'It's a meaning is a leader means' is incorrect and unclear. The corrected sentence simplifies and clarifies the meaning by removing unnecessary words and restructuring the sentence for clarity.

× I use uh dictionary to search for a right meaning for her name.

✓ I use a dictionary to search for the right meaning of her name.

The phrase 'use uh dictionary' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'search for a right meaning for her name' is better expressed as 'search for the right meaning of her name' to correctly use prepositions and articles.

× No, actually everyone has a unique name and all of us has different name and different meaning.

✓ No, actually everyone has a unique name and all of us have different names and different meanings.

The subject 'all of us' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have'. Also, 'different name' and 'different meaning' should be plural to agree with the plural subject.

× Same as with the attitude, we have distinct attitude as individual.

✓ Same with attitude, we have distinct attitudes as individuals.

The noun 'attitude' should be plural 'attitudes' to match 'we'. Also, 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' to agree with the plural subject 'we'.

× Children's name nowadays are more modern than those in the past, simply because they don't want to give the same name as their ancestor or they don't want to repeat the same name in their next generation.

✓ Children's names nowadays are more modern than those in the past, simply because they don't want to give the same name as their ancestors or repeat the same name in their next generation.

'Children's name' should be plural 'children's names' because it refers to multiple children. Also, 'ancestor' should be plural 'ancestors' to match the plural subject 'they'.

× Yes, the name Lao Lao means to enlighten everyone and this name was taken from traditional Chinese and it's a good meaning.

✓ Yes, the name Lao Lao means to enlighten everyone and this name was taken from traditional Chinese culture and it has a good meaning.

The phrase 'taken from traditional Chinese' is incomplete; it should specify 'traditional Chinese culture' or 'tradition'. Also, 'it's a good meaning' is better expressed as 'it has a good meaning' for clarity.