Names— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Also, provide specific details with linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, explain what 'Enlightenment' means to you and how it relates to your culture.

例: Yes, my name has a special meaning. It represents Enlightenment, which means the light that guides a person to wisdom. This is connected to our Hindu culture, where names often reflect spiritual values and personal growth.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to answer directly with a topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Use simple and clear vocabulary to express your ideas.

例: I would choose names that have positive meanings. For example, I would select names that symbolize nature or spirituality because I believe these qualities are important for a person's character.

提案: Your answer should be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Be specific about the uniqueness of names in your family.

例: No, no one in my family has the same or similar name as me. Each family member has a unique name that reflects their individuality, although our names may be related in meaning.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but has grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to improve coherence and provide specific examples of traditional and modern names.

例: Yes, there are noticeable differences between past and modern Chinese names. Nowadays, people prefer modern and globalized names, which are more sophisticated, instead of traditional ones that reflect cultural heritage.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a direct answer with specific details and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, the surname Li is very popular in China. It is a traditional name with a long history, and many people have this surname because of its cultural significance.

× It represent the Enlightenment, the light that can illuminate yourself.

✓ It represents the Enlightenment, the light that can illuminate yourself.

The verb 'represent' should be in third person singular form 'represents' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. In English, verbs in the present tense add an 's' for third person singular subjects.

× It actually the related to our Hindu culture, to the ethnic, ethnicity and some kinds of perspective to bloom the one person and someone.

✓ It is actually related to our Hindu culture, to ethnicity and some kinds of perspectives to help a person bloom.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'It' to form the correct 'There be' structure. Also, 'the ethnic, ethnicity' is redundant and incorrect; 'ethnicity' alone is sufficient. 'Some kinds of perspective' should be plural 'perspectives'. The phrase 'to bloom the one person and someone' is awkward; 'to help a person bloom' is clearer.

× Are you definitely picked the name on the context of meaning, the depth of depth of positivity and some kinds of symbolizing that people will connect with the nature and some kinds of spirituality?

✓ Do you definitely pick the name based on the meaning, the depth of positivity, and some kinds of symbols that people will connect with nature and spirituality?

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Are you definitely picked' which mixes present and past forms. The correct modal verb usage here is 'Do you definitely pick' for present tense questions. Also, 'on the context of meaning' should be 'based on the meaning'. 'Depth of depth of positivity' is redundant; 'depth of positivity' suffices.

× No, we don't have same name or similar name in our family.

✓ No, we don't have the same name or similar names in our family.

The phrase 'same name or similar name' should be 'same name or similar names' because 'similar' implies plural. Also, 'the' is needed before 'same name' to specify it.

× We have the unique and exceptional name each and individual of ourselves that can interrelated of our member but don't relate or don't similar to other person.

✓ We each have a unique and exceptional name that can be related to our family members but is not similar to other persons.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'name each and individual of ourselves' should be 'each have a unique and exceptional name'. 'Interrelated of our member' is incorrect; it should be 'related to our family members'. 'Don't similar' is incorrect; it should be 'is not similar'. Also, 'other person' should be plural 'other persons' or 'other people'.

× Yes, I think there is noticeable differences between the past name and the modern name of the Chinese people.

✓ Yes, I think there are noticeable differences between past names and modern names of Chinese people.

'There is' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'differences'. Also, 'the past name and the modern name' should be plural 'past names and modern names' to match 'differences'.

× People are getting more modernized and globalized day by day.

✓ People are becoming more modernized and globalized day by day.

The verb 'getting' is informal; 'becoming' is more appropriate in this context. However, 'getting' is acceptable in spoken English, so this is a minor stylistic suggestion.

× So the Chinese people are getting quite popular with the modern name sophisticated and the and the world class name rather than the tradition.

✓ So Chinese people are adopting quite popular modern, sophisticated, and world-class names rather than traditional ones.

'Getting quite popular with the modern name sophisticated' is incorrect. The sentence should say people are adopting popular modern, sophisticated, and world-class names. 'The tradition' should be 'traditional ones' to refer to names.

× I think surname is Lee quite popular in China.

✓ I think the surname Lee is quite popular in China.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'surname'. Also, the word order should be 'the surname Lee is quite popular'.

× China people actually take the lead as a surname for their traditional impact and also the and also the quite common popularity for the people, people are more.

✓ Chinese people actually use the surname Lee due to its traditional significance and common popularity among them.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'China people' should be 'Chinese people'. 'Take the lead as a surname' is incorrect; 'use the surname' is better. The phrase 'for their traditional impact and also the and also the quite common popularity for the people, people are more' is confusing and redundant. The correction clarifies the intended meaning.