Names— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there is a small redundancy with "my my father" and the answer could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating words and keep your sentences natural and fluent. Also, you can add a linking phrase to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My name has a special meaning because my father chose it to express his deep love for my mother. It reminds me of their strong relationship, which makes me feel proud to carry such a meaningful name.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but the phrase "traditional family first name" is a bit confusing since usually the family name is last. Also, you can improve coherence by using linking words and clarify your points with more specific examples.

例: For my next generation, I would choose simple and easy-to-pronounce names because they are more convenient in daily life. Besides keeping the traditional family name, I would prefer a short and memorable given name, such as "Lina" or "Kai".

提案: Your answer is detailed and well-structured, but you can improve naturalness by avoiding phrases like "written in a different order" which may confuse listeners. Try to use simpler expressions and add linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: No, nobody in my family has the same name as me because my name is unique and a bit complicated. While most family members have two or three words in their names, mine is longer and arranged differently. Furthermore, its special meaning makes it very distinctive.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly, which affects coherence and effectiveness. Please complete your answer with clear contrasting points about current naming trends. Also, avoid abrupt transitions like "and however" without proper connection. Use linking words to compare past and present naming practices.

例: In the past, Chinese parents often chose names that expressed love for the country or traditional values like peace and strength because collective identity was important. However, nowadays, parents prefer more individualistic and modern names that reflect personal hopes and creativity.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks specific examples, which reduces clarity and content richness. Please provide complete sentences and specific popular names with their meanings. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and logical.

例: Yes, many popular names in China carry special meanings related to family hopes and love. For example, the name "Wei" is common because it symbolizes strength and kindness. Parents often choose such names to express their wishes for their children's future.

× My name has a special meaning because my my father chooses to show his deep love for my mother.

✓ My name has a special meaning because my father chooses to show his deep love for my mother.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'my' which is a typographical error rather than a grammar problem. Removing the duplicate 'my' corrects the sentence.

× This was because people valued collective identity and however, nowadays, parents.

✓ This was because people valued collective identity; however, nowadays, parents.

The conjunction 'and however' is incorrect. 'However' is a conjunctive adverb and should be preceded by a semicolon or period, not 'and'. Using a semicolon before 'however' correctly connects the two clauses.