Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether you did puzzles, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (when, what kind). Use correct grammar and simple sentence structures, avoid fragments. Keep to under 5 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'when'.

例: Yes, I did. I remember receiving my first puzzle on my fourth birthday — it was a wooden doll puzzle. I often played with puzzles in the afternoons because they were fun and helped me learn shapes.

提案: Answer directly and organize your reply: state the main time you do puzzles, then add a brief specific reason or example. Use linking words such as 'usually' or 'sometimes' and correct verb forms. Keep sentences complete and avoid repetition.

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored at home. For example, if my family is out and I'm alone in the afternoon, I will spend an hour solving a puzzle to pass the time.

提案: Clearly state a preference and explain why. Use comparative language correctly (e.g., 'I prefer... to...'). Give a specific reason why one type is harder and a short example. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect word order.

例: I prefer number puzzles to word puzzles because I enjoy logical thinking. However, word puzzles are more difficult for me since I struggle with vocabulary and spelling — for instance, crosswords take me longer to complete.

提案: Give a balanced opinion. Begin with a clear stance (yes or no), then provide specific reasons and acknowledge the opposite view briefly. Use linking words like 'however' and correct grammar. Be concise and avoid vague words like 'bizarre'.

例: I think puzzles can be good for many older people because they help keep the mind active. However, some complex puzzles may be frustrating if they require fine motor skills or a lot of time, so simpler or assisted puzzles are better for them.

× Yes, I did too person in my. On my 4th birthday. You can give me puzzle which is related to a toy and doll, then I.

✓ Yes, I did puzzles when I was a child. On my 4th birthday someone gave me a puzzle related to toys and dolls.

The original contains fragmented and misordered clauses and missing subjects/verbs. This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine ideas into complete sentences: specify time ('when I was a child', 'on my 4th birthday'), include a clear subject ('someone gave me'), and use correct noun phrases ('a puzzle related to toys and dolls'). Suggestion: make one main clause per idea and ensure subjects and verbs are present.

× And do my puzzles doing the. I know my buses to when I feel bored. And sometimes they are nobody at my home. Then I feel bored. I do.

✓ I do puzzles when I feel bored or when I am on a bus. Sometimes there is nobody at home, so I do puzzles then.

This is sentence structure error (ID 26) with unclear word order and missing verbs. Fix by arranging ideas logically: state conditions ('when I feel bored', 'when I am on a bus'), use correct existence verb ('there is nobody at home'), and connect sentences using conjunctions ('so'). Suggestion: express each condition clearly and use appropriate linking words.

× I like doing number puzzle as compared to what puzzle. The more difficult for me was what puzzle because I'm not good. Add the words as computer numbers.

✓ I prefer number puzzles to word puzzles. Word puzzles are more difficult for me because I'm not good at forming words, spelling, or working with letters compared to numbers.

The original misuses pronouns ('what puzzle') and has unclear noun references; this is Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and also sentence structure issues. Replace vague pronouns with explicit nouns ('word puzzles'), use comparative structure ('prefer X to Y'), and include correct preposition ('good at'). Suggestion: always refer to specific nouns rather than vague words like 'what', and use 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons.

× No, I think it is not good for all people to do bizarre because the puzzles are too large and taking lots of time with the old person where was not was not too alone they need the help of.

✓ No, I don't think all elderly people should do difficult puzzles because the puzzles can be large and time-consuming, and older people may need help to complete them.

The original misuses modals and contains awkward phrasing; categorize as Modal verb usage (ID 4) and sentence structure errors. Use 'should' to express recommendation, 'may' or 'can' for possibility, and correct noun phrases ('elderly people', 'time-consuming'). Clarify that older people may need help. Suggestion: use appropriate modal verbs for advice ('should') and possibility ('may'), and simplify sentences for clarity.