Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'did not only enhance my cognitive developments' should be 'not only enhanced my cognitive development'. Also, avoid redundancy like 'helped me to kill time' which sounds informal and less effective. Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar.

例: Yes, I loved doing puzzles as a child, especially during the summer holidays. I found them enjoyable because they not only enhanced my cognitive development but also kept me entertained.

提案: Your answer is clear and logical, but some phrases are slightly awkward, such as 'take my puzzles away from my home' and 'some of the pieces may have gone'. Try to use more natural expressions like 'bring puzzles with me' and 'some pieces might get lost'. Also, use linking words like 'so' instead of 'therefore' for a more natural flow.

例: I usually don't do puzzles when I travel because it's inconvenient to bring them along, and I'm worried some pieces might get lost. So, I only do puzzles at home when I feel bored.

提案: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammatical mistakes. 'Red puzzles' seems to be a typo or unclear term; you probably meant 'word puzzles'. Also, 'It is very challenging to me' should be 'They are very challenging for me'. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons using linking words.

例: I prefer word puzzles because they help me learn new vocabulary. On the other hand, number puzzles are quite challenging for me, so I usually avoid them.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'it's enhance' should be 'it enhances'. Also, 'quantitative abilities' is not the best phrase here; 'cognitive abilities' would be more appropriate. Use linking words like 'and' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, definitely. Doing puzzles is an excellent activity for older people because it enhances their cognitive abilities, such as memory and problem-solving skills, which are important for keeping the brain healthy. Additionally, it helps reduce stress.

× I thought it was a good activity because it did not only enhance my cognitive developments, but it also helped me to kill time.

✓ I thought it was a good activity because it did not only enhance my cognitive development, but it also helped me to kill time.

The word 'developments' is incorrect here because 'cognitive development' is an uncountable noun referring to the process of development in cognition. Using the plural form 'developments' is inappropriate in this context. The correct form is 'cognitive development'. This improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I never do puzzles when I am on a trip because it's not convenient to take my puzzles away from my home and I am afraid that some of the pieces may have gone during the trip.

✓ I never do puzzles when I am on a trip because it's not convenient to take my puzzles with me from home and I am afraid that some of the pieces may get lost during the trip.

The phrase 'take my puzzles away from my home' is awkward and incorrect. The correct preposition is 'with me' to indicate carrying something along. Also, 'may have gone' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is that pieces might get lost, so 'may get lost' is appropriate. These changes improve naturalness and correctness.

× I prefer red puzzles because it helps me to know more vocabulary.

✓ I prefer word puzzles because they help me to learn more vocabulary.

The original sentence has 'red puzzles' which seems to be a typo or incorrect word choice; it should be 'word puzzles'. Also, 'it helps' is incorrect because 'puzzles' is plural, so 'they help' is correct. Additionally, 'know more vocabulary' is unnatural; 'learn more vocabulary' is better.

× For number puzzles. It is very challenging to me so I don't do number puzzles.

✓ Number puzzles are very challenging for me, so I don't do them.

The original sentences are fragmented and awkward. 'For number puzzles.' is a sentence fragment. Also, 'It is very challenging to me' is unnatural; the correct expression is 'challenging for me'. Combining into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Working on puzzles is an excellent activity for older people because it's enhance their quantitative abilities such as memory and problem solving skills which are important to keep their brain healthy.

✓ Working on puzzles is an excellent activity for older people because it enhances their cognitive abilities such as memory and problem-solving skills, which are important to keep their brains healthy.

The pronoun 'it's' (it is) should be followed by the verb in third person singular form 'enhances', not 'enhance'. Also, 'quantitative abilities' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'cognitive abilities'. 'Problem solving' should be hyphenated as 'problem-solving'. 'Brain' should be plural 'brains' to agree with 'older people'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and meaning.