Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and avoid unnecessary details that do not relate to puzzles. Use correct sentence structures and avoid filler words like 'uhm'.

例: No, I didn't do puzzles in my childhood because I preferred outdoor activities like swimming and playing sports.

提案: Your answer is unclear and fragmented. Respond directly to the question with a complete sentence, and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I don't usually do puzzles, but when I travel, I prefer to rest because I often feel tired after the journey.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to form complete sentences and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

例: Although I don't often do puzzles, if I had to choose, I would prefer word puzzles because I enjoy language and literature.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and contains unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas in complete sentences and explain your reasons clearly using linking words.

例: I definitely think puzzles are good for older people because they help to train the brain and keep it active, which is important as we age.

× I wasn't very popular in Where I leave.

✓ I wasn't very popular in where I live.

The verb 'leave' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'live' to indicate the place where the speaker resides. This is a vocabulary choice error related to verb usage in the present tense context.

× In my childhood in puzzle has never been one of them.

✓ In my childhood, puzzles have never been one of them.

The noun 'puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles' to match the context of multiple activities. Also, the verb should agree with the plural subject, so 'has' changes to 'have'.

× Aye. Have some other hobbies? Or not feel bored.

✓ I have some other hobbies and I don't feel bored.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. It should be a complete sentence with subject and verb to convey the meaning clearly.

× And I would usually just sleep during my trip because.

✓ And I would usually just sleep during my trip because I am physically drained.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. It needs a complete clause to explain the reason for sleeping during the trip.

× What I'm going on a trip, I'm just always. Physically drained.

✓ When I go on a trip, I am always physically drained.

The original sentence has incorrect tense and structure. 'What I'm going' should be 'When I go' to indicate habitual action in present tense.

× If I was given it which unity to try, I would probably.

✓ If I were given the opportunity to try, I would probably.

The sentence is incomplete and contains incorrect words ('which unity'). It should be a conditional sentence with correct vocabulary and complete structure.

× I am very interested in no word and like literature.

✓ I am very interested in new words and literature.

The phrase 'no word' is incorrect; it should be 'new words'. Also, 'like literature' should be 'and literature' to connect the two interests properly.

× Ilu train your brain.

✓ It trains your brain.

The pronoun 'Ilu' is incorrect and unclear. The correct subject pronoun is 'It' referring to puzzles, and the verb should be in third person singular form 'trains'.

× For old people, because of their age, the brain, kind of. I'm the salaried.

✓ For old people, because of their age, the brain kind of deteriorates.

The phrase 'I'm the salaried' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is that the brain deteriorates with age, so the verb 'deteriorates' in present tense is appropriate.