Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, fluent statement with correct grammar and avoid filler words. Include one specific detail to make the answer informative (e.g., location or a notable feature). Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: My hometown is Simi, a historical city in southern Kazakhstan known for its old architecture and local markets.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because or also). Avoid fillers and correct grammar (it’s → its).

例: I like my hometown because the people are very friendly and welcoming, and there is a beautiful historic bridge near the river that many families visit on weekends.

提案: Use the correct tense and concise phrasing: state the time period clearly, then give one reason for the future plan using a linking word (because or as). Reduce hesitations and avoid informal contractions (gonna).

例: I have lived in Simi since I was born and I still live there, but I plan to move to the capital for my university studies because it has better educational opportunities.

提案: Give a clear opinion in one sentence, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because or however). Remove repetitions and fillers, and use correct grammar (e.g., "an old city", "many shopping malls").

例: I don't think it's a great place for young people because it is an old city with few entertainment options and not many shopping malls, so young people often move to larger cities for more activities.

× My hometown is Simi. It is uh, uh, historical city of Kazakhstan.

✓ My hometown is Simi. It is a historical city in Kazakhstan.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun with a descriptive phrase. Also use the preposition 'in' for location within a country. Suggestion: say 'a historical city in Kazakhstan.'

× I like my hometown for it's, uh, friendly and happy people and. A beautiful bridge and yeah.

✓ I like my hometown for its friendly, happy people and its beautiful bridge.

Use the possessive pronoun 'its' not the contraction 'it's' (it is). Avoid sentence fragments by connecting ideas into one sentence and remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'its friendly, happy people and its beautiful bridge.'

× I lived there, uh, since my birth and I'm still living there, but umm, I think that I'm gonna move to the capital of the Kazakhstan because of studies.

✓ I have lived there since my birth and I'm still living there, but I think that I'm going to move to the capital of Kazakhstan for my studies.

Use the present perfect 'have lived' with 'since' to show an action continuing to the present. Avoid informal 'gonna' and use 'going to'. Omit the article 'the' before country names unless required; use 'for my studies.' Suggestion: 'I have lived there since my birth...'.

× I have lived there since my birth and I'm still living there, but I think that I'm going to move to the capital of Kazakhstan for my studies.

✓ I have lived there since my birth and I'm still living there, but I think that I'm going to move to the capital, Astana, for my studies.

Optional: when mentioning 'the capital' it is clearer to name it or use punctuation. If you keep 'the capital of Kazakhstan' you can keep original, but avoid repeating 'the Kazakhstan.' Suggestion: use 'the capital, Astana' or 'the capital of Kazakhstan' without 'the' before country name.

× To be honest, I don't think so because uh, my hometown is umm, to be honest, very old city and there are no, uh, a lot of umm. Umm, shopping malls, Uh, and so on.

✓ To be honest, I don't think so because my hometown is a very old city and there are not a lot of shopping malls and so on.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'very old city.' For negation use 'there are not a lot of shopping malls' rather than 'there are no, a lot of.' Remove repeated fillers and duplicate phrases. Suggestion: 'my hometown is a very old city and there are not many shopping malls.'

× there are not a lot of shopping malls and so on.

✓ there are not many shopping malls and so on.

Use 'many' with countable plural nouns in negative sentences; 'a lot of' is informal and should not be split by 'no.' Suggestion: 'not many shopping malls'.