Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적으로 부정확한 부분이 많습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 중복되는 표현을 피하고, 정확한 시제와 전치사를 사용하도록 연습하세요.

例: My hometown is Seoul, the capital of Korea. I lived there for about 17 years before moving to another city. Even though I no longer live there, I still consider Seoul my hometown.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많습니다. 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 만들고, 문장 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 말하는 연습을 하세요.

例: I like the beautiful buildings and K-pop in my hometown, Seoul. Recently, K-pop has become very popular worldwide, which makes me proud because it shows how famous Korea has become.

提案: 답변이 혼란스럽고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 시간을 나타내는 표현을 명확히 하고, 문장을 간결하게 구성하며, 불필요한 정보는 줄이도록 연습하세요.

例: I lived in Seoul for about 17 years, from when I was born until I finished junior high school. After that, I moved to another city with my family.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많아 이해하기 어렵습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 말하는 연습을 하세요.

例: Yes, Seoul is a great place for young people because it offers many entertainment options and cultural events. For example, there are popular areas where young people gather to enjoy music and festivals.

× My hometown is Seoul is capital of Korea.

✓ My hometown is Seoul, the capital of Korea.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error due to the repetition of 'is' and missing article before 'capital'. Adding a comma and the definite article 'the' before 'capital' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× I lived in Seoul for so many years.

✓ I have lived in Seoul for many years.

The sentence refers to a period extending to the present or recent past, so the present perfect tense 'have lived' is more appropriate than simple past 'lived'. Also, 'so many years' is informal; 'many years' is clearer.

× It's not really long, but maybe 17 years I lived there.

✓ It's not really long, but I lived there for maybe 17 years.

The original sentence has incorrect word order. The time expression 'maybe 17 years' should come after the verb phrase 'lived there' for correct English sentence structure.

× But now my home moved to other city, but my hometown is so because I live there for almost just I arrive here.

✓ But now my home has moved to another city, but my hometown is still Seoul because I lived there until I arrived here.

The sentence has multiple issues: missing auxiliary verb 'has' for present perfect tense, incorrect preposition 'to other city' should be 'to another city', unclear phrase 'my hometown is so' corrected to 'my hometown is still Seoul', and awkward phrasing 'I live there for almost just I arrive here' corrected to 'I lived there until I arrived here'.

× I like pretty bills and K pop to about my hometown because my hometown is Korea.

✓ I like the pretty buildings and K-pop about my hometown because my hometown is in Korea.

'Pretty bills' is incorrect; likely meant 'pretty buildings'. 'K pop to about' is incorrect phrasing; corrected to 'K-pop about'. Also, 'my hometown is Korea' is incorrect; it should be 'my hometown is in Korea'.

× Recent, uh, nowadays so many K pop is popular now and there's so many people like it and the Korea is became more famous and I really proud of it.

✓ Recently, K-pop has become very popular, and many people like it. Korea has become more famous, and I am really proud of it.

The original sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms: 'so many K pop is popular now' should be 'K-pop has become very popular'; 'there's so many people like it' should be 'many people like it'; 'the Korea is became' is incorrect, corrected to 'Korea has become'; 'I really proud of it' needs the verb 'am'.

× I lived there for 17 years old.

✓ I lived there for 17 years.

'For 17 years old' is incorrect; 'old' is used to describe age, not duration. The correct phrase is 'for 17 years'.

× I'm not sure I forgot it because I moved so many countries.

✓ I'm not sure; I forgot because I moved to so many countries.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and preposition. 'Moved so many countries' should be 'moved to so many countries'. Adding a semicolon clarifies the sentence.

× But when I born to June before high school, I lived for Seoul.

✓ But from when I was born until June before high school, I lived in Seoul.

The original sentence has incorrect verb form 'born' without auxiliary, incorrect preposition 'for Seoul' instead of 'in Seoul', and unclear time expression. Corrected to proper past tense and prepositions.

× After junior high school, I came out to other city and then my home also moved to other city.

✓ After junior high school, I moved to another city, and then my home also moved to another city.

'Came out to other city' is incorrect; 'moved to another city' is correct. Also, 'other city' should be 'another city'.

× Yes, my hometown is really good place for young people because in Seoul especially whom they is for young people.

✓ Yes, my hometown is a really good place for young people because Seoul is especially suitable for young people.

Missing article 'a' before 'really good place'. The phrase 'whom they is for young people' is incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'Seoul is especially suitable for young people'.

× And then maybe Taiwan, some kind of like this city is really popular for young people.

✓ Also, maybe like Taiwan, some cities like this are really popular for young people.

The sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Some kind of like this city' is corrected to 'some cities like this'. Added 'also' for better flow.

× So many young people go there and therefore play just like special day, have a their special day somethings.

✓ Many young people go there and celebrate special days or have their own special events.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Play just like special day' and 'have a their special day somethings' are incorrect. Corrected to clear and grammatical expression.