Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は簡潔ですが、文法の誤りと不自然な表現があります。例えば、「Yokohama is easier to live」は不自然で、「Yokohama is an easy place to live」などが適切です。また、複数形の名詞には冠詞や複数形を正しく使いましょう。

例: My hometown is Yokohama. It is an easy place to live because it has good access to Tokyo. There are many supermarkets and entertainment options available.

提案: 内容は良いですが、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。また、「I can do anything」は曖昧なので、具体的に表現しましょう。

例: I like my hometown because it has various entertainment facilities. For example, I can watch movies, visit theme parks, and go shopping. Therefore, I enjoy living in Yokohama.

提案: 文法と意味が不明瞭な部分が多いです。時制の使い方や単語の選択に注意し、明確に答えましょう。例えば、「I have lived in Yokohama for 20 years since I was born.」のように。

例: I have lived in Yokohama for 20 years since I was born. I have never moved to other cities. I really love the atmosphere of my hometown.

提案: 文法の誤りと不自然な表現があります。「young people were feel like dangerous」は意味が通じません。理由を明確にし、正しい文法で表現しましょう。

例: I think my hometown is not a good place for young people because it is crowded every day, which can make them feel unsafe.

× Yokohama is easier to live.

✓ Yokohama is easier to live in.

The adjective 'easier' needs to be followed by the preposition 'in' to correctly describe the place where it is easier to live. Without 'in', the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect.

× It is easier to access to Tokyo and there are many supermarket and entertainment.

✓ It is easier to access Tokyo and there are many supermarkets and entertainment options.

The verb 'access' should not be followed by the preposition 'to'. Also, 'supermarket' should be plural 'supermarkets' to match 'many', and 'entertainment' should be specified as 'entertainment options' for clarity.

× there are many supermarket and entertainment.

✓ there are many supermarkets and entertainment options.

When using 'many', the noun should be plural. 'Supermarket' should be 'supermarkets'. Also, 'entertainment' is uncountable, so adding 'options' clarifies the meaning.

× It is easier to access to Tokyo and there are many supermarket and entertainment.

✓ It is easier to access Tokyo and there are many supermarkets and entertainment options.

The preposition 'to' after 'access' is unnecessary and incorrect. 'Access' is a transitive verb and directly takes the object without 'to'.

× I can see a movie or go to the theme park and go shopping.

✓ I can watch a movie, go to the theme park, and go shopping.

The verb 'see' is less appropriate for movies; 'watch' is better. Also, adding commas improves clarity and parallel structure.

× I can do anything, so I like Yokohama.

✓ I can do many things, so I like Yokohama.

'Anything' is too broad and can imply negative meaning; 'many things' is more natural and positive in this context.

× I lived here for 20 years.

✓ I have lived here for 20 years.

Since the speaker is still living there, the present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to indicate an action continuing up to now.

× I was born in Yokohama and until 9 now I have lived in Oklahoma and I've I've never transfer other cities.

✓ I was born in Yokohama, and until I was 9, I lived there. Since then, I have lived in Oklahoma and have never transferred to other cities.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. It needs to be split and reordered for clarity. 'Transfer' should be 'transferred', and 'to' is needed after 'transferred'.

× I've I've never transfer other cities.

✓ I have never transferred to other cities.

The verb 'transfer' should be in past participle 'transferred' after 'have'. Also, the preposition 'to' is necessary after 'transferred'.

× I love the mysties.

✓ I love the mysteries.

The word 'mysties' is a misspelling of 'mysteries'. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity.

× I think my hometown is not good place for young people because Yokohama is crowded every day so young people were feel like dangerous.

✓ I think my hometown is not a good place for young people because Yokohama is crowded every day, so young people feel unsafe.

'Place' needs the article 'a'. 'Were feel like dangerous' is incorrect; it should be 'feel unsafe' to express the intended meaning. Also, adding a comma improves sentence flow.