Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'Is your hometown my hometown' và 'frail' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và từ vựng phù hợp để mô tả quê hương một cách tự nhiên hơn.

例: My hometown is in the northern part of Vietnam. It is a beautiful and peaceful place with many green fields and friendly people.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'have' nên là 'has'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có những từ không phù hợp như 'Paddington' và 'flying cars' gây khó hiểu. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: I like my hometown because it has beautiful scenery. In the afternoons, I often play football with my friends in the park, which makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I had like here' nên là 'I have lived here'. Bạn nên sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành cho câu hỏi về khoảng thời gian sống. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I have lived here for 15 years because I was born in this city. I really like it here because it feels like home and there are many friendly people.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp như 'the tile', 'people eating very pleasant play'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it is peaceful and has less traffic. In the afternoons, young people can enjoy the beautiful views and outdoor activities.

× Is your hometown my hometown in North in in Vietnam.

✓ My hometown is in the North of Vietnam.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Is your hometown my hometown in North in in Vietnam.' which is confusing and grammatically incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate location is 'in' followed by 'the North of Vietnam'. The sentence should be restructured to 'My hometown is in the North of Vietnam.' to clearly express the location.

× It's a beautiful and peaceful place with many green, frail and friendly people.

✓ It's a beautiful and peaceful place with many green, frail, and friendly people.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing a comma before 'and' in the list, which is a punctuation issue rather than grammar. However, 'frail' is an unusual adjective to describe people in this context and may be a misuse. Possibly the intended word was 'friendly' or 'kind'. If 'frail' is intended, it is grammatically correct but semantically odd.

× I like my hometown because it's beautiful and have beautiful scenery.

✓ I like my hometown because it's beautiful and has beautiful scenery.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to agree in number. 'Have' is used with plural subjects, but here 'it' refers to the singular 'hometown'.

× In the afternoon I play in Paddington and flying cars with my friends, which makes me feel uh.

✓ In the afternoon, I play in Paddington and fly kites with my friends, which makes me feel happy.

The phrase 'play in Paddington and flying cars' is unclear and likely incorrect. Possibly the student meant 'fly kites' or 'play flying cars' (a game). Also, a comma is needed after 'In the afternoon'. The verb 'play' should be followed by a noun or gerund; 'flying cars' is unclear. The correction assumes 'fly kites' as a common activity.

× I had like here for 15 years because I was born in this city.

✓ I have lived here for 15 years because I was born in this city.

The phrase 'I had like here' is incorrect. The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to express an action continuing up to the present. 'Had like' is not a correct verb form.

× I really like it here because it feel like home and there are many friendly people.

✓ I really like it here because it feels like home and there are many friendly people.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'feels' instead of 'feel' to agree in number.

× Yes, uh, the tile a good place for young people, umm, people eating very pleasant play and don't crowded in traffic.

✓ Yes, uh, the town is a good place for young people. People enjoy pleasant activities and the traffic is not crowded.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect pronouns and word usage. 'The tile' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'the town'. 'People eating very pleasant play' is incorrect; possibly intended 'people enjoy pleasant play'. 'Don't crowded in traffic' is incorrect; it should be 'the traffic is not crowded'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct pronoun and verb usage.

× MMM at the afternoon, uh, beautiful view.

✓ In the afternoon, there is a beautiful view.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. 'MMM at the afternoon, uh, beautiful view.' is not a complete sentence. Adding 'In the afternoon, there is a beautiful view.' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.