Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'it provide' to 'it provides'. Keep your answer concise and natural by limiting to 3-4 sentences.

例: My hometown is Basal, a part of Ludhiana district. It is a beautiful and peaceful place that offers many facilities, including schools, markets, banks, and hospitals.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your points with specific examples and correct grammar, for example, 'a plethora of facilities' and 'a religious gurdwara where I go'.

例: I like my hometown because it has a plethora of facilities such as good schools, banks, and playgrounds. Moreover, I find the religious places, especially the gurdwara I visit regularly, very interesting.

提案: Use correct verb tenses and sentence structures. Avoid redundancy and filler words. Make your answer more coherent by linking ideas logically and keeping it concise.

例: I have been living in my hometown since birth. My grandfather built a house there, and my family and I have lived there ever since. It is a comfortable and interesting place to live.

提案: Reduce filler words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why it is good for young people. Keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers many facilities. For example, there are playgrounds where youngsters can play and stay active, which is beneficial for their growth.

× My hometown is Basal, which is a part of district of Ludhiana.

✓ My hometown is Basal, which is a part of the district of Ludhiana.

In English, when referring to a specific district, the definite article 'the' is required before 'district' to specify which district is being talked about.

× Actually, my hometown is uh, quite a beautiful.

✓ Actually, my hometown is uh, quite beautiful.

The word 'beautiful' is an adjective and does not need the article 'a' before it when used predicatively. Saying 'a beautiful' without a noun is incorrect.

× It's a peaceful place and uh, it provide lot of facilities like uh, educational facilities, market, bank as well as hospital.

✓ It's a peaceful place and uh, it provides a lot of facilities like uh, educational facilities, market, bank as well as hospital.

The subject 'it' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'provides' with an 's'. Also, 'lot of' needs an article 'a' before it.

× it provide lot of facilities like uh, educational facilities, market, bank as well as hospital.

✓ it provides a lot of facilities like uh, educational facilities, market, bank as well as hospital.

The quantifier 'lot of' requires the article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× Basically my hometown is quite interesting because of plethora of facilities that are available like good educational school, banks, playground.

✓ Basically my hometown is quite interesting because of a plethora of facilities that are available like good educational schools, banks, playgrounds.

The phrase 'plethora of' requires the article 'a' before 'plethora'. Also, 'school' and 'playground' should be plural to match the context of multiple facilities.

× like good educational school, banks, playground.

✓ like good educational schools, banks, playgrounds.

When listing multiple types of facilities, the nouns should be in plural form to indicate more than one.

× Interestingly I found more interesting thing as religious places.

✓ Interestingly, I found religious places to be more interesting.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Reordering and rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Sick religious gurdwara where I come.

✓ There is a Sikh religious gurdwara where I go.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb. 'Sick' is a misspelling of 'Sikh'. 'Where I come' is incorrect; 'where I go' or 'where I visit' is appropriate.

× I have residing over there since my birth.

✓ I have been residing over there since my birth.

The present perfect continuous tense requires 'have been' plus the present participle 'residing' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present.

× from that time I with my family, with my grandparents, with my siblings, I lived over there and it's a quite interesting place for my living purposes.

✓ From that time, I have lived there with my family, my grandparents, and my siblings, and it's quite an interesting place for me to live.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. Also, sentence structure and word order are improved for clarity.

× Yes, definitely. Uh, hometown is quite a good place for young people because, uh, uh, because number of facilities are available, uh, and this hometown, apart from this, uh, uh, in the youngsters, uh, play in the playground, which is quite interesting, uh, as well as fruitful for them.

✓ Yes, definitely. The hometown is quite a good place for young people because a number of facilities are available, and the youngsters play in the playground, which is quite interesting as well as beneficial for them.

The phrase 'number of' requires the article 'a' before it. Also, sentence structure is corrected for clarity and fluency.