Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有點冗長且語法不夠自然。建議你直接回答問題，並用一兩句話清楚描述家鄉，避免重複。

例: My hometown is Kaohsiung, a historical city located in the southern part of Taiwan.

提案: 回答中有語法錯誤且用詞不當，建議使用正確的詞彙和句型，並用連接詞使句子更流暢。

例: I like the traditional and delicious food in my hometown, which attracts many foreigners and visitors. My favorite dish is shaved ice because the weather there is very hot.

提案: 你的回答語法不正確且表達不清楚。建議用正確時態和句型，並清楚說明時間和原因。

例: I lived in Kaohsiung for about 20 years, but recently I moved to Taichung, a city in central Taiwan, because of my job and to become more independent.

提案: 回答中有語法錯誤且表達不夠清晰。建議用連接詞使句子更連貫，並用更自然的表達方式。

例: Yes, my hometown is great for young people because it combines advanced artificial intelligence technology with many shopping malls where you can shop during the week and weekends. Additionally, there are plenty of traditional and delicious foods to enjoy.

× I live in Taiwan and my hometown is in the southern part of the Taiwan which is called Kaohsiung is a really historical city.

✓ I live in Taiwan and my hometown is in the southern part of Taiwan, which is called Kaohsiung. It is a really historical city.

In English, we do not use the definite article 'the' before country names like 'Taiwan'. Also, the original sentence is a run-on sentence and needs to be split for clarity.

× In my hometown, we have a lot of traditional and delicious food, which is very fascinated for the foreigner and the other people from the other city.

✓ In my hometown, we have a lot of traditional and delicious food, which is very fascinating for foreigners and people from other cities.

The adjective 'fascinated' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'fascinating' to describe the food. Also, 'foreigner' should be plural 'foreigners' and 'the other people from the other city' is better expressed as 'people from other cities'.

× And my favorite one is the shave eyes, because in my hometown it's really hot.

✓ And my favorite one is shaved ice, because in my hometown it's really hot.

The phrase 'the shave eyes' is incorrect. The correct term is 'shaved ice' without the definite article 'the'.

× I lived there about 20 years ago, but recently I moved to the other city which is the middle part of Taiwan, which is called Taiju.

✓ I lived there for about 20 years, but recently I moved to another city in the middle part of Taiwan, which is called Taichung.

The phrase 'I lived there about 20 years ago' suggests a one-time event in the past, but the intended meaning is duration, so 'I lived there for about 20 years' is correct. Also, 'the other city' is better as 'another city'. The city name 'Taiju' seems to be a misspelling of 'Taichung'.

× And the reason why I moved is because of my work and I have to independent myself.

✓ And the reason why I moved is because of my work and I have to be independent.

The phrase 'I have to independent myself' is incorrect. 'Independent' is an adjective and cannot be used as a verb. The correct phrase is 'I have to be independent'.

× Yes, it is a good place for young people because we combine a lot of artificial intelligence technology and also we have a lot of shopping mall that could provide you to shopping in the week, on the weekend.

✓ Yes, it is a good place for young people because we combine a lot of artificial intelligence technology and also we have many shopping malls that allow you to shop during the week and on weekends.

'A lot of' is acceptable but 'many' is more appropriate for countable nouns like 'shopping malls'. Also, 'shopping mall' should be plural 'shopping malls'. The phrase 'provide you to shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'allow you to shop'.

× And also we have a lot of traditional and delicious food that you can visit.

✓ And also we have a lot of traditional and delicious food that you can try.

The verb 'visit' is incorrect when referring to food. The correct verb is 'try' or 'taste' when talking about food.