Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了对家乡的喜爱，但语法和表达不够自然。建议使用完整句子，避免语法错误，如“I love my hometown very much.”，并且可以增加一些具体细节使回答更丰富。

例: My hometown is Shanghai, a large and vibrant city in China. It is very beautiful, with modern skyscrapers and peaceful parks where people can relax. I love my hometown very much because it combines urban life with natural spaces.

提案: 回答中有很多犹豫词和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议减少填充词，使用更准确的表达，如“I like the efficient and friendly public services because they save time for citizens.”

例: I like the public services in my hometown because they are very efficient and convenient. For example, the staff are friendly and quick, which saves a lot of time for citizens like me.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，如“I have lived there for 20 years. My family moved there when I was five years old.”

例: I have lived in Shanghai for 20 years. My family moved there when I was five years old, so I have many memories of growing up in this city.

提案: 回答中有重复和犹豫词，表达不够流畅。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，如“Definitely, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers many job opportunities and has a vibrant young community.”

例: Definitely, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers many job opportunities. Moreover, there is a vibrant community of young adults living there, which makes the city lively and dynamic.

× Hometown is Shanghai, another big city in China.

✓ My hometown is Shanghai, another big city in China.

The sentence lacks a subject. 'Hometown' alone is not a subject; it needs a possessive pronoun 'My' to indicate whose hometown it is. Adding 'My' corrects the sentence structure.

× I'm very love my hometown.

✓ I really love my hometown.

'Very' is used to modify adjectives or adverbs, not verbs. Since 'love' is a verb, the correct adverb is 'really' to express strong feeling. Therefore, 'I'm very love' is incorrect; it should be 'I really love'.

× The public service there because it is very convenient and the time saving for, you know, uh, citizens.

✓ The public service there is very convenient and time-saving for, you know, citizens.

The original sentence lacks a verb after 'The public service there'. Adding 'is' completes the sentence structure. Also, 'time saving' should be hyphenated as 'time-saving' when used as an adjective.

× I very love the, uh, speed and uh, the attitude of uh, public servants.

✓ I really love the speed and the attitude of public servants.

As before, 'very' cannot modify the verb 'love'. The correct adverb is 'really'. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'uh' should be omitted for clarity.

× They would there for 20 years.

✓ I have lived there for 20 years.

'They would there' is incorrect and unclear. The speaker is referring to themselves, so 'I have lived there' is appropriate to express duration up to now.

× When I was five years old, my family, uh, removed there so.

✓ When I was five years old, my family moved there.

'Removed' is incorrect here; the correct past tense verb is 'moved' to indicate relocation. Also, 'so' at the end is unnecessary and should be omitted.