Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh lặp từ và sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng và tránh sử dụng từ không cần thiết như "Umm". Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng giới từ đúng (ví dụ: "in there" nên là "there" hoặc "in here" không cần thiết).

例: My hometown is Hojin City, the largest city in Vietnam. It is a major economic center with many factories and businesses.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "Umm" và nên giải thích rõ hơn về các món ăn bạn đề cập để làm câu trả lời thêm sinh động và cụ thể hơn.

例: I really like the food and friendly people in my city. For example, dishes like gumtam and far are very delicious and popular among locals.

提案: Bạn cần sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành cho câu hỏi về khoảng thời gian sống ở một nơi ("I have lived there since I was born"). Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "It's about 20 years old" (nên nói "I am about 20 years old").

例: I have lived there since I was born, so about 20 years. I love my hometown because it's where my family lives.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng số nhiều cho danh từ đếm được (businesses) và tránh bắt đầu câu bằng "And". Hơn nữa, hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, of course. There are many businesses and factories where young people can find good jobs. Moreover, my city is very vibrant and full of opportunities.

× Umm, there are many factories and business in there in here.

✓ Umm, there are many factories and businesses there.

The word 'business' should be plural 'businesses' to match 'factories' and indicate multiple entities. Also, 'in there in here' is redundant and incorrect; 'there' is sufficient to indicate location.

× There are many delicious dishes like gumtam and far because they are really tasty.

✓ There are many delicious dishes like gumtam and phở because they are really tasty.

The word 'far' is likely a misspelling of 'phở', a Vietnamese dish. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity. Also, 'like' is correctly used to list examples.

× I lived there since I was born.

✓ I have lived there since I was born.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to express an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Lived' in simple past suggests the action is finished, which is incorrect here.

× It's about 20 years old.

✓ I am about 20 years old.

The phrase 'It's about 20 years old' incorrectly refers to the hometown's age. The student likely means their own age, so 'I am about 20 years old' is correct.

× I really love my hometown because this is a place where I can live with my family.

✓ I really love my hometown because it is a place where I can live with my family.

The pronoun 'this' is incorrect when referring back to 'my hometown'; 'it' is the correct pronoun to refer to a previously mentioned singular noun.

× Yes, of course, there are many business and factories where young people can find better jobs.

✓ Yes, of course, there are many businesses and factories where young people can find better jobs.

The word 'business' should be plural 'businesses' to match 'factories' and indicate multiple entities.