Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making the sentences more natural. For example, use 'in the southwestern part' instead of 'in southwestern part'. Also, avoid starting sentences with conjunctions and try to combine ideas smoothly.

例: My hometown is Colna, a vibrant and charming town located in the southwestern part of Bangladesh. It is well known for its friendly people and peaceful atmosphere.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid vague phrases like 'and so on' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I like many things about my hometown, especially the people and the culture. The people are very hospitable and friendly, and they always treat visitors with kindness.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use the correct tense and structure to express duration and future plans. Also, avoid mixing two ideas in one sentence without proper linking.

例: I have lived in Colna since I was born with my parents. However, in the future, I want to move to another city like Dhaka to find better opportunities.

提案: Your answer is short and lacks specific details. Avoid vague phrases like 'and so on'. Provide more examples and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and informative.

例: Definitely yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers many opportunities, such as cultural activities and clubs where they can socialize and develop their skills.

× My hometown is Colna, A vibrant and charming town which is located in southwestern part of Bangladesh.

✓ My hometown is Colna, a vibrant and charming town which is located in the southwestern part of Bangladesh.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' because it is in the middle of the sentence. Also, 'southwestern part' requires the definite article 'the' before it to specify the particular part of Bangladesh.

× Among them. I would suggest their people is to very hospitable, very friendly, they treat you.

✓ Among them, I would say the people are very hospitable and very friendly; they treat you well.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect structure. 'Among them.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the next sentence. 'Their people is to very hospitable' is grammatically incorrect; 'people' is plural so the verb should be 'are', and 'to very hospitable' is incorrect usage. Also, 'they treat you' is incomplete and needs an adverb like 'well'.

× I leave to Kona since I was born with my parents but in future I want to move another city such as Dhaka for big opportunity.

✓ I have lived in Colna since I was born with my parents, but in the future, I want to move to another city such as Dhaka for better opportunities.

The verb 'leave' is incorrect here; the present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to express an action continuing from the past to present. 'Kona' is corrected to 'Colna' assuming a typo. 'Move another city' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Big opportunity' should be plural 'better opportunities' to sound natural.

× I prefer numerous type of things about my hometown such as the people, culture and so on.

✓ I prefer numerous types of things about my hometown such as the people, culture, and so on.

'Numerous' should be followed by a plural noun 'types' instead of singular 'type'. Also, a comma is needed before 'and so on' for clarity.

× Definitely yes, because my hometown has numerous opportunities such as cultural activities, club and so on.

✓ Definitely yes, because my hometown has numerous opportunities such as cultural activities, clubs, and so on.

'Club' should be plural 'clubs' to match 'numerous opportunities' and maintain parallel structure in the list.