Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn để truyền đạt thông tin về quê hương một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: My hometown is in the North Central region of Vietnam. It is famous for its rich historical heritage, including many ancient dynasties, and a variety of delicious local dishes.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên chia câu rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ phù hợp và từ vựng chính xác để mô tả những điều bạn thích về quê hương một cách cụ thể và mạch lạc.

例: What I like most about my hometown is its beautiful atmosphere and friendly people. The weather is mild, so it's a great place to relax and enjoy nature. I also love the fresh and delicious local food, which is very different from the fast food in big cities.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và từ vựng. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng các liên từ và cấu trúc câu chính xác để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

例: I have lived in my hometown for most of my life. I was born and raised there, so I am very familiar with the people, the food, and the lifestyle. However, I sometimes travel to other cities for study or work.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng kết thúc không hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên hoàn thiện câu trả lời, sử dụng liên từ phù hợp và tránh để câu bị dang dở để tạo ấn tượng tốt hơn.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people. It has many schools, coffee shops, and sports areas where they can study, relax, and hang out with friends. Besides, the cost of living is quite low, and the people are friendly, which makes life comfortable.

× My hometown is in the North Central resource of Vietnam.

✓ My hometown is in the North Central region of Vietnam.

The word 'resource' is incorrect in this context; the correct preposition and noun phrase is 'in the North Central region' to indicate a geographical area.

× It's well known for its stunning beast rich historical heritage shot at the whole Dynasties series and a wide range of tasty local dishes.

✓ It's well known for its stunningly rich historical heritage spanning the whole Dynasties series and a wide range of tasty local dishes.

The phrase 'stunning beast rich' is incorrect; 'stunningly rich' is the correct adverb-adjective combination. Also, 'shot at the whole Dynasties series' is unclear and incorrect; 'spanning the whole Dynasties series' better expresses the intended meaning.

× What I like most about my hometown is its beautiful atmosphere and friendly people live there isn't to roast so it's a great place to relax and enjoy nature.

✓ What I like most about my hometown is its beautiful atmosphere and friendly people who live there. It isn't too hot, so it's a great place to relax and enjoy nature.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear structure. Adding 'who' clarifies the relative clause, and splitting into two sentences improves clarity. 'Isn't to roast' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'isn't too hot'.

× I also love the local foods which is fresh and delicious beside the city eating floors quickly so it's feels.

✓ I also love the local foods, which are fresh and delicious. Besides, the city has many eating places, so it feels lively.

'Foods' should be plural with 'are' not 'is'. 'Beside the city eating floors quickly so it's feels' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it is corrected to 'Besides, the city has many eating places, so it feels lively' for clarity and correctness.

× Other I sometimes travel to other cities for study or work.

✓ Otherwise, I sometimes travel to other cities for study or work.

'Other' is incorrectly used; the correct word is 'Otherwise' to indicate contrast or additional information.

× Yes, my hometown is quite a good place for young people. It has many schools, coffee shops and sports areas where young people can study, relax and hang out with friends. Besides, the cost of living is quite low and people are friendly with makes life comfortable. However.

✓ Yes, my hometown is quite a good place for young people. It has many schools, coffee shops, and sports areas where young people can study, relax, and hang out with friends. Besides, the cost of living is quite low, and people are friendly, which makes life comfortable.

The phrase 'people are friendly with makes life comfortable' is incorrect. It should be 'people are friendly, which makes life comfortable' to correctly connect the clauses. Also, commas are added for clarity and correct listing.