Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ ngữ chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, "more facilities such as hospital, supermarket" nên được sửa thành "many facilities such as hospitals and supermarkets". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để câu văn tự nhiên hơn.

例: I come from Wing City, a beautiful city in Vietnam. I really love it because it combines classical charm with modern development. Moreover, the city offers many facilities such as hospitals and supermarkets, which make life convenient.

提案: Bạn cần chia câu rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng từ ngữ chính xác. Ví dụ, "I also refer my local foods" không đúng ngữ pháp và nên sửa thành "I also enjoy the local food". Ngoài ra, nên dùng liên từ để nối các ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "it is a both classical and modern people living here are friendly".

例: I really love my city because it is both classical and modern. The people living here are friendly and open. Additionally, I enjoy the local food because it is very delicious and fresh.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến ngữ pháp, ví dụ "we has" nên là "we have". Câu "we has more great moments in here" không rõ nghĩa và nên được diễn đạt lại để rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: I have been living here with my family for about 20 years. We rent a small apartment near Wing University, and we have shared many great moments here.

提案: Bạn cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, "is is a cheap" nên là "is cheap" và "it have" nên là "it has". Câu "for some people" không rõ ràng, nên nói rõ hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên mạch lạc và có liên từ để nối ý.

例: I think my city is a good place for young people because the cost of living is cheap and there are many career opportunities to help me develop myself.

× My city has more facilities such as hospital, supermarket.

✓ My city has more facilities such as hospitals and supermarkets.

The nouns 'hospital' and 'supermarket' should be in plural form because 'facilities' implies multiple items. Using singular forms here is incorrect.

× I really love my city because it is a both classical and modern people living here are friendly and open.

✓ I really love my city because it is both classical and modern, and the people living here are friendly and open.

The phrase 'a both' is incorrect; 'both' should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, the sentence needs a conjunction 'and' to connect the two independent clauses properly.

× I also refer my local foods because it is very delicious and fresh.

✓ I also prefer my local foods because they are very delicious and fresh.

The verb 'refer' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'prefer'. Also, 'local foods' is plural, so the pronouns should be 'they' and 'are' instead of 'it' and 'is'.

× We rent a small apartment near Wing University and we has more great moments in here.

✓ We rent a small apartment near Wing University and we have more great moments here.

The subject 'we' requires the verb 'have' instead of 'has'. Also, 'in here' is incorrect; 'here' alone is sufficient.

× I think my city is a a good place for some people because the cost of living here is is a cheap and it have more career opportunities to develop myself.

✓ I think my city is a good place for some people because the cost of living here is cheap and it has more career opportunities to develop myself.

The phrase 'a cheap' is incorrect because 'cheap' is an adjective and does not need an article here. Also, 'it have' should be 'it has' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The repeated words 'a a' and 'is is' are typographical errors.