Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to correct grammatical errors and improve sentence clarity. For example, say "My hometown is in the southeast of China. It is a small city in Jiangxi province, surrounded by mountains and located by the sea." Also, avoid redundancy and ensure place names are accurate.

例: My hometown is in the southeast of China. It is a small city in Jiangxi province, surrounded by mountains and located by the sea.

提案: Try to use more precise vocabulary and link your ideas smoothly. For example, say "I really enjoy the traditional cuisine of my hometown because it is fresh and delicious. Most dishes feature seafood, which I particularly like."

例: I really enjoy the traditional cuisine of my hometown because it is fresh and delicious. Most dishes feature seafood, which I particularly like.

提案: Avoid filler words and grammatical mistakes. A clearer answer would be: "I lived there for about 18 years, but now I live in Hangzhou because I am studying at university."

例: I lived there for about 18 years, but now I live in Hangzhou because I am studying at university.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to explain your opinion. For example: "Not really, because my hometown is quite small and does not offer enough opportunities for young people to advance their careers or find stable jobs."

例: Not really, because my hometown is quite small and does not offer enough opportunities for young people to advance their careers or find stable jobs.

× My hometown is in the southeast of the China.

✓ My hometown is in the southeast of China.

The definite article 'the' is not used before country names like 'China' unless the name includes words like 'kingdom' or 'republic'. Therefore, 'the China' is incorrect; it should be 'China'.

× A small city in Jajang province is surrounded by mountains and coincide in the sea.

✓ It is a small city in Jajang province, surrounded by mountains and located by the sea.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and has a verb agreement issue ('coincide' is incorrect here). The sentence is restructured to include a subject 'It' and correct verb usage 'located by the sea' to improve clarity and grammar.

× Much of them are seafood, and I like seafood.

✓ Much of it is seafood, and I like seafood.

'Much' refers to uncountable nouns and should be followed by singular verb and pronoun 'it' instead of 'them'. Therefore, 'Much of them' is incorrect; it should be 'Much of it'.

× I have lived there for maybe 18 years and but now I live in Hangzhou because I I'm studying in university.

✓ I have lived there for about 18 years, but now I live in Hangzhou because I am studying at university.

The sentence has redundant conjunctions ('and but') and incorrect preposition ('in university' should be 'at university'). Also, 'I I'm' is a typo. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper grammar.

× It's not really because my hometown not very big and have not enough opportunity for young people to promote their career or find some landing job.

✓ It's not really, because my hometown is not very big and does not have enough opportunities for young people to advance their careers or find suitable jobs.

The sentence lacks auxiliary verbs ('is', 'does'), has incorrect quantifiers ('opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities'), and awkward phrases ('promote their career' changed to 'advance their careers', 'landing job' to 'suitable jobs'). These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.