Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'I was born dear' is unclear and 'lost green forest' should be 'lush green forest'. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I am from Dang, a beautiful district in the Midwestern region of Nepal. I was born and have lived there all my life. It is famous for its stunning natural scenery, including lush green forests, rolling hills, and the Boba River flowing through it.

提案: Your answer is too short and repetitive ('lovely' used twice). Try to provide more specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, correct grammar such as 'warm peoples' should be 'warm people'.

例: I like my hometown because it has a pleasant climate and warm, friendly people. Moreover, it has a rich cultural heritage, which makes the local culture very unique and interesting.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding linking words and slightly more detail to sound natural and effective. For example, you can mention the number of years or emphasize your connection to the place.

例: I was born there and have lived there since my childhood, so I have spent my entire life in my hometown.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'It it is full of natures' should be 'It is full of nature' and 'as peaceful environment' should be 'a peaceful environment'. Also, avoid repeating 'young people' unnecessarily and provide more specific reasons.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it is full of natural beauty and offers a peaceful environment, which helps young people relax and focus on their studies or hobbies.

× I was born dear and am permanent resident of this place.

✓ I was born here and am a permanent resident of this place.

The word 'dear' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'here' to indicate location. Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'permanent resident'. This is a past tense context for 'was born' and present tense for 'am', so the correction maintains tense consistency.

× It's known for its stunning natural scenery with lost green forest, rolling hill and the Boba River flowing through it.

✓ It's known for its stunning natural scenery with lush green forests, rolling hills, and the Boba River flowing through it.

The adjective 'lost' is incorrect; the correct word is 'lush' to describe dense green forests. Also, 'forest' and 'hill' should be plural to match the context. Commas and conjunctions are added for clarity.

× As Dang is a lovely place to live, it has lovely climate, warm peoples with cultural heritage and the main thing is its local culture.

✓ As Dang is a lovely place to live, it has a lovely climate, warm people with cultural heritage, and the main thing is its local culture.

The noun 'climate' is singular and requires the article 'a'. 'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural noun referring to persons collectively. The sentence is corrected for proper quantifiers and noun usage.

× Young people, yes, my hometown is a good place for young people. It it is full of natures and as peaceful environment, which is very good for young people in our generation.

✓ Young people, yes, my hometown is a good place for young people. It is full of nature and has a peaceful environment, which is very good for young people in our generation.

The phrase 'full of natures' is incorrect; 'nature' is uncountable and should be singular. 'As peaceful environment' is incorrect; it should be 'has a peaceful environment' to correctly use the verb and article. Also, the repeated 'It it' is corrected to 'It is'.