Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is informative but can be made more natural and fluent by improving sentence structure and grammar. Also, avoid redundancy by combining related ideas smoothly using linking words.

例: My hometown is Bijnor, located in Uttar Pradesh in northern India. It offers essential facilities such as healthcare and education, and is surrounded by lush green fields.

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent by using linking words and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use more precise vocabulary and provide specific examples to support your points.

例: I adore my hometown because I was born there. Moreover, the people are humble and always willing to help one another. Additionally, the village has all the basic amenities needed for comfortable living.

提案: Your answer is quite good but can be improved by linking sentences more smoothly and avoiding slight grammatical errors. Also, try to be concise and clear.

例: I have lived in my hometown since childhood, which is a peaceful place with friendly people. However, I moved to another city for college to gain new experiences. After completing my studies, I returned home and have been working here since then.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Please focus on correct subject-verb agreement and complete your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Yes, absolutely. My hometown has all the basic amenities required by individuals. Moreover, there are good employment opportunities, as well as quality healthcare and education facilities.

× Apart from this, my village consists green fields.

✓ Apart from this, my village consists of green fields.

The verb 'consist' requires the preposition 'of' to correctly link to the object. Without 'of', the sentence is grammatically incorrect. Therefore, 'consists green fields' should be corrected to 'consists of green fields'.

× Yes absolutely. It have all basic amenities that are required for individual.

✓ Yes absolutely. It has all basic amenities that are required for individuals.

The subject 'It' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' to correctly refer to people in general. Hence, the sentence should be corrected to 'It has all basic amenities that are required for individuals.'

× Apart from this, employment opportunities in my area are well and healthcare and education also could.

✓ Apart from this, employment opportunities in my area are good, and healthcare and education are also available.

The phrase 'employment opportunities are well' is incorrect because 'well' is an adverb and cannot describe 'opportunities'. The correct adjective is 'good'. Also, 'healthcare and education also could' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'healthcare and education are also available' to convey the intended meaning clearly.