Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer wa natural desu ga, sentence structure ga chotto fuman desu. "Closing to MRT station" wa "Close to the MRT station" ni shite kudasai. Also, answer wo 5 sentences ijou ni shinai you ni shite, topic sentence to supporting details wo tsukutte kudasai.

例: My hometown is a small district located in the north of Taiwan. It is very convenient because it is close to the MRT station. I really love my hometown because the people there are friendly and welcoming. The environment is peaceful and suitable for families. Overall, it is a great place to live.

提案: Answer wa yoku narimashita ga, "restaurant" wa "restaurants" ni shite kudasai. Also, sentence wo kanpeki ni shite, "umm" nado no filler words wo herashite kudasai. More specific examples wo tsukatte kudasai.

例: What I like most about my hometown is the friendly and helpful people. This makes the community feel warm and welcoming. In addition, there are many delicious restaurants, such as traditional Taiwanese food places. For example, I often visit a night market where I can enjoy various local dishes. These aspects make my hometown very special to me.

提案: Answer wa jyouzu desu ga, "from my kindergarten to elementary school" wa "from kindergarten to elementary school" ni shite kudasai. Also, "the one of the best memories" wa "one of the best memories" ni shite kudasai. More clear and concise ni shite kudasai.

例: I have lived there for almost 10 years, from kindergarten to elementary school. During those years, I have many happy memories. For example, my parents raised me there, and I made many close friends. It was a very joyful time in my life. I feel grateful for growing up in such a friendly environment.

提案: Answer wa chotto wakari nikui desu. "Think yes" wa "I think yes" ni shite kudasai. Sentence structure wo kaizen shite, more clear ni shite kudasai. Also, "market" wa "markets" ni shite kudasai. More specific details wo tsukatte kudasai.

例: Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people. The transportation is very convenient, which makes it easy to travel. There are many schools, parks, and markets where young people can spend their time. For example, the local park hosts events for teenagers. Overall, it offers many opportunities for young people to enjoy their life.

× Umm my hometown is a small district located in north of Taiwan and it is a very convenient place.

✓ Umm my hometown is a small district located in the north of Taiwan and it is a very convenient place.

The phrase 'located in north of Taiwan' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'north'. In English, when referring to specific regions like 'north', 'south', 'east', or 'west' of a place, the definite article 'the' is required. Therefore, it should be 'located in the north of Taiwan'. This is a common preposition and article usage error.

× Closing to MRT station and I really love my hometown because people there are friendly and.

✓ Close to the MRT station and I really love my hometown because people there are friendly.

The phrase 'Closing to MRT station' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'Close to the MRT station'. 'Close' is the adjective used to describe proximity, and 'to' is the correct preposition. Also, 'the' is needed before 'MRT station' because it refers to a specific station. Additionally, the sentence was incomplete and has been corrected accordingly.

× In addition, there are lots of delicious restaurant there.

✓ In addition, there are lots of delicious restaurants there.

The word 'restaurant' should be plural 'restaurants' because 'lots of' indicates a large quantity, which requires a plural noun. This is a singular and plural issue related to quantifiers.

× I have lived there almost 10 years from my kindergarten to elementary school.

✓ I have lived there for almost 10 years, from kindergarten to elementary school.

The phrase 'from my kindergarten to elementary school' is awkward; 'my' is unnecessary here. Also, 'for' is needed to indicate the duration of time. The sentence is in present perfect tense, which is appropriate for an action continuing up to now, but the preposition and article usage needed correction.

× In those year, uh, the one of the best memories because my parents raised me up there and I made lots of close friends there.

✓ In those years, uh, one of the best memories is that my parents raised me there and I made lots of close friends there.

'In those year' should be plural 'years' because it refers to multiple years. 'The one of the best memories' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the best memories'. Also, 'raised me up' is better as 'raised me' because 'raise up' is not commonly used in this context. The sentence structure was improved for clarity.

× Think yes, I'm just like mentioned one of his the transportation is very convenient and there are lots of schools, parks, market that younger people could join and their life.

✓ I think yes, as I just mentioned, the transportation is very convenient and there are lots of schools, parks, and markets that young people can join in their life.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'Think yes' should be 'I think yes'; 'just like mentioned one of his the transportation' is unclear and corrected to 'as I just mentioned, the transportation'; 'market' should be plural 'markets' to match 'lots of'; 'younger people' is better as 'young people'; 'could join and their life' is corrected to 'can join in their life' for clarity and correct modal verb usage. Prepositions and articles were also corrected.

× And also there's a good place for them to to go with their.

✓ Also, there are good places for them to go with their friends.

The sentence is incomplete and has a repeated word 'to to'. It lacks an object after 'their'. The correction completes the sentence logically by adding 'friends' as the object, fixes the repeated word, and improves sentence structure for clarity.