Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and provides specific information, but it could be more natural by combining the sentences and avoiding repetition of 'my hometown'.

例: I come from Shijiazhuang City, which is the capital of Hebei Province in China.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words and more natural expressions to improve coherence and clarity.

例: What I like most about my hometown is its convenient transportation since it serves as a major hub. For example, there are hospitals nearby and train routes connecting to almost every destination in the country.

提案: Your answer is clear and concise. To make it more natural, you could use the present perfect tense and add a linking phrase.

例: I have lived there for 18 years, from birth until I moved to the United States for college.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't think my hometown is ideal for young people because the economy is not very active and lacks creative industries. Therefore, I would recommend young people seeking better job opportunities to move to larger cities like Beijing or Shanghai.

× From my hometown, you can find hospital, train route to every destination you want to go inside the country.

✓ From my hometown, you can find hospitals and train routes to every destination you want to go to inside the country.

The sentence lacks plural forms for 'hospital' and 'train route' when referring to multiple items. Using the plural forms 'hospitals' and 'train routes' correctly indicates more than one, which fits the context of a transportation hub.

× I lived there for 18 years since I was born until I moved to the United States for college.

✓ I have lived there for 18 years since I was born until I moved to the United States for college.

The use of 'lived' in simple past is incorrect here because the action started in the past and continued until a specific point. The present perfect 'have lived' is more appropriate to express the duration from birth until moving.

× So for young people who wants to seek better job opportunities, I would recommend them to move to bigger cities like Beijing or Shanghai.

✓ So for young people who want to seek better job opportunities, I would recommend that they move to bigger cities like Beijing or Shanghai.

The verb 'wants' should be 'want' to agree with the plural subject 'young people'. Also, after 'recommend', the correct structure is 'recommend that someone do something' without 'to'. This correction improves subject-verb agreement and modal verb usage.