Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides some interesting information, but it is a bit long and includes unnecessary political details that are not directly relevant to the question. Try to keep your answer concise and focused on the location and main characteristics of your hometown. Also, watch for minor grammar issues such as missing articles and prepositions.

例: My hometown is Tehran, the bustling capital of Iran, located in the Middle East. It is known for its rich history and vibrant culture.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid vague phrases like "hardly trying" which can confuse the meaning. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about the climate and culture you like.

例: I really enjoy the mild climate in Tehran, especially during spring. Additionally, our rich culture, including traditional music and festivals, makes living here special.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating "here" multiple times and try to combine sentences for better flow. Also, use appropriate prepositions and verb forms.

例: I have lived in Tehran all my life. I was born, raised, studied, and now work here.

提案: Your answer is honest but contains some hesitations and grammar mistakes. Avoid filler words like "uh" and use correct expressions such as "it is difficult to find proper work." Also, try to provide more specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Honestly, Tehran is not an ideal place for young people because of financial difficulties. Moreover, it is hard to find suitable job opportunities here.

× My hometown is Tehran, the bustling capital of Iran, which is located in Middle East and as we know here, is renowned for its complicated political situation.

✓ My hometown is Tehran, the bustling capital of Iran, which is located in the Middle East and, as we know, is renowned for its complicated political situation.

The phrase 'in Middle East' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'Middle East'. Also, commas are needed around 'as we know' to set off this parenthetical phrase for clarity.

× We are hardly trying to uphold our beliefs in here.

✓ We are hardly trying to uphold our beliefs here.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'here'. 'Here' alone functions as an adverb indicating place, so 'in here' is redundant and incorrect in this context.

× I have been in Tehran since I was born.

✓ I have been living in Tehran since I was born.

The verb 'have been' requires a complement that indicates a state or action. Saying 'have been in Tehran' is less natural than 'have been living in Tehran' to express continuous residence since birth.

× So it's better to say all my life I was in Tehran.

✓ So it's better to say I have been in Tehran all my life.

The phrase 'all my life' indicates a period continuing to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have been' is appropriate instead of the simple past 'was'.

× And also here is very difficult to find a proper work.

✓ And also, here it is very difficult to find proper work.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'is'. Also, 'a proper work' is incorrect because 'work' is an uncountable noun here and does not take an article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'proper work' without 'a'.