Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して直接的に答え、具体的な情報を簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。例えば、"My hometown is Osaka, a large city in Japan known for its vibrant culture and delicious food."のように答えると良いです。

例: My hometown is Osaka, a large city in Japan known for its vibrant culture and delicious food.

提案: 文が不完全で意味が伝わりにくいです。理由を明確にし、具体的な詳細を加えて答える練習をしましょう。例えば、"I like my hometown because the people are friendly and the cost of living is affordable, which makes it a pleasant place to live."のように答えると良いです。

例: I like my hometown because the people are friendly and the cost of living is affordable, which makes it a pleasant place to live.

提案: 文法と表現が不自然で、意味が伝わりにくいです。期間を明確に述べ、自然な表現で理由を説明しましょう。例えば、"I have lived there for 20 years since I was born. I appreciate it because of the beautiful nature and many good memories from my school years."のように答えると良いです。

例: I have lived there for 20 years since I was born. I appreciate it because of the beautiful nature and many good memories from my school years.

提案: 回答がほとんど意味を成しておらず、内容が不明瞭です。質問に対して明確に答え、理由を具体的に述べる練習をしましょう。例えば、"Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it is safe and has many opportunities for education and entertainment."のように答えると良いです。

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it is safe and has many opportunities for education and entertainment.

× I lived in Osaka 4 years ago and it's a large city, but the present there is no major and many beautiful parts where people can be lost, for example for some kind of customers is very critical.

✓ I lived in Osaka 4 years ago and it's a large city, but at present there is no major industry and many beautiful parts where people can get lost; for example, for some kinds of customers, it is very critical.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'the present' instead of 'at present' to indicate the current time, which is a past tense issue. Also, 'major' is incomplete and should be 'major industry' or similar. The phrase 'people can be lost' is awkward; 'people can get lost' is more natural. The sentence structure is complex and needs clearer punctuation. The phrase 'for some kind of customers is very critical' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it should be 'for some kinds of customers, it is very critical.' These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I like my hometown because people there are very friendly and comfortable, so it is a comfortable price to live there and moreover.

✓ I like my hometown because people there are very friendly and welcoming, so it is affordable to live there, and moreover, it has many good qualities.

The original sentence misuses 'comfortable' to describe people and price; 'friendly and welcoming' better describes people, and 'affordable' is appropriate for price. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and moreover,' which is incomplete. The correction provides a complete thought and uses appropriate quantifiers and adjectives.

× I have lived there for 20 years since I was born. I appreciate there because there are a lot of nature and good memories spent. Easy to leave school year.

✓ I have lived there for 20 years since I was born. I appreciate it because there is a lot of nature and many good memories. It was easy to leave school years.

The phrase 'a lot of nature' is acceptable but 'there is a lot of nature' is better than 'there are a lot of nature' due to 'nature' being uncountable. 'Good memories spent' is incorrect; 'many good memories' is correct. 'Easy to leave school year' is unclear; possibly intended 'It was easy to leave school years' or 'It was easy to finish school years.' The correction clarifies these points.

× Yes, because, uh, there are every single. Tissue, it wants safety and people.

✓ Yes, because there is safety and many people there.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'There are every single' is incomplete and incorrect. 'Tissue' seems out of context or a mishearing. The correction simplifies the sentence to convey that the hometown is safe and populated, which fits the question about being good for young people.