Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and structured. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'neighborhood' and use linking words to improve flow. Also, clarify the location more precisely.

例: My hometown is Sudbury, a quiet and cozy neighborhood in Sleimania. I really love it because of its peaceful atmosphere and friendly community.

提案: Your answer has good content but is somewhat repetitive and lacks linking words. Try to combine ideas and use connectors to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: I like that every house in my hometown has a small garden, which makes the area clean, quiet, and cozy. This greenery also helps us breathe fresher air, contributing to a healthier environment.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases like 'a nourished her.' Also, avoid informal contractions like 'wanna' in formal speaking. Structure your answer with clear sentences and linking words.

例: I have lived in my hometown my entire life since I was born. However, I plan to move to another city soon because I want to explore more of our region and gain a deeper understanding of different cities.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by avoiding informal language like 'cause' and by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to vary your vocabulary.

例: Yes, I believe my hometown is a great place for young people because it is cozy, quiet, and clean. Additionally, the residents are polite and understanding, which makes it an enjoyable place to live.

× I was born and a nourished her.

✓ I was born and raised here.

The phrase 'a nourished her' is incorrect. The correct past tense verb to describe being brought up in a place is 'raised'. Also, 'here' is the correct pronoun to refer to the current location, not 'her'. This correction fixes the verb tense and pronoun usage.

× I was born and a nourished her.

✓ I was born and raised here.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrectly used to refer to the place. The correct pronoun is 'here' to indicate the location where the speaker was born and raised.

× every single house has a little garden in front of their house

✓ every single house has a little garden in front of it

The pronoun 'their' is plural and does not agree with the singular noun 'every single house'. The correct singular pronoun is 'it' to match the singular noun.

× So I believe that the people my age will love it to live in this hometown.

✓ So I believe that people my age will love living in this hometown.

The phrase 'love it to live' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'love living' to express enjoyment of an activity. Also, 'the people my age' can be simplified to 'people my age' for naturalness.