Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer repeats the examiner's question instead of providing information. To improve, directly answer the question by stating the name and location of your hometown in a clear and concise sentence.

例: My hometown is Vancouver, a beautiful city located on the west coast of Canada.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. To improve, use clear and correct sentences, avoid repeating words, and add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: What I like most about my hometown is that it is far from pollution and surrounded by nature. Additionally, farming is the main source of livelihood there, which gives the place a peaceful and rural atmosphere.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but includes filler words and some grammatical mistakes. To improve, avoid fillers like 'uh', use correct verb forms, and structure your answer clearly with linking words.

例: I have lived in my hometown for almost 17 years since I was born. I grew up there and completed my schooling in that town.

提案: Your answer is somewhat contradictory and unclear. To improve, clearly state your opinion, support it with specific reasons, and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because most jobs are related to farming and dairy farming. Since today's generation prefers professional careers, they might find limited opportunities there.

× The most thing, the most important thing about my hometown is it's away from the pollution and it is very close to nature.

✓ The most important thing about my hometown is that it's away from pollution and very close to nature.

The phrase 'The most thing' is incorrect; it should be 'The most important thing'. Also, 'the pollution' is incorrect here because pollution is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the' in this context. The sentence is corrected to improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Nature, land and the farming is the main surviving, surviving.

✓ Nature, land, and farming are the main sources of livelihood.

The subject consists of multiple items (nature, land, and farming), so the verb should be plural ('are' instead of 'is'). Also, 'the farming' is better as 'farming' without 'the' here, and 'main surviving' is incorrect; 'main sources of livelihood' is a clearer and grammatically correct phrase.

× I spent almost, uh, 17 years of my life there and, uh, since I born there, I grew up there.

✓ I spent almost 17 years of my life there, and since I was born there, I grew up there.

The phrase 'since I born there' is incorrect; the past participle 'was born' is required after 'since'. This correction ensures proper use of past tense and correct verb form.

× I did my schooling up in my hometown.

✓ I did my schooling in my hometown.

The preposition 'up' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The correct phrase is 'did my schooling in my hometown'.

× No, I don't think so. It's a good place for young people because the main source of income is farming there.

✓ No, I don't think so. It's not a good place for young people because the main source of income is farming there.

The original sentence contradicts itself by saying 'No, I don't think so' and then 'It's a good place'. The correction clarifies the intended meaning by adding 'not' to align with the initial negative response.

× So most of the people lie on farming, dairy farming.

✓ So most of the people rely on farming, especially dairy farming.

The verb 'lie on' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'rely on'. Also, 'farming' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. This correction improves verb usage and clarity.

× So if I consider about let's say young people, so today's generation most likely to have professional jobs.

✓ If I consider young people, today's generation is more likely to have professional jobs.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions and awkward phrasing. Removing unnecessary words and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.