Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains a question repeated at the start. Try to avoid repeating the examiner's question and focus on giving a clear, concise response. Also, watch for grammatical errors such as singular/plural agreement ('club' should be 'clubs'). Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I'm from Imo State, and its capital city, Owerri, is well-known for its vibrant nightlife, with many hotels and clubs that attract visitors.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by starting directly with your opinion and using linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid vague pronouns like 'they' without clear reference. Be more specific about the parks or friendliness to enrich your answer.

例: I really appreciate the abundance of parks and green spaces in my hometown, which provide peaceful places for relaxation. Moreover, the community is very friendly, making it a welcoming environment for everyone.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer the question directly by stating the duration you have lived there. Use linking words to explain your feelings about living there. Avoid awkward phrases like 'childhood's memories' and 'not looking forward to relocate'.

例: I have lived in this community since I was a child, so it holds many fond memories for me. Therefore, I intend to continue living here and have no plans to move elsewhere soon.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains unclear phrases such as 'administration club' and 'where we do'. Try to provide specific examples of activities for young people and explain why the town is suitable for them. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid grammatical mistakes.

例: Absolutely. My hometown offers many activities for young people, such as sports clubs and cultural events, which help them stay active and socially engaged.

× There are a lot of hotels and club in my city.

✓ There are a lot of hotels and clubs in my city.

The noun 'club' is countable and plural here, so it should be 'clubs' to agree with 'hotels' and the plural quantifier 'a lot of'.

× What I appreciate the most is that they have a lot of parks and green spaces where people can relax and also people in my community are very friendly.

✓ What I appreciate the most is that we have a lot of parks and green spaces where people can relax, and also people in my community are very friendly.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect because the subject is 'my community' or 'we'. Using 'we' correctly refers to the community the speaker belongs to, making the sentence clearer and more accurate.

× I grew up in this community and have had my childhood's memories in this area, so is a place that I really want to continue living.

✓ I grew up in this community and have had my childhood memories in this area, so it is a place where I really want to continue living.

The phrase 'my childhood's memories' is incorrect; 'childhood memories' is the correct form without the possessive. Also, the sentence was missing the subject 'it' before 'is a place', and 'where' is needed to connect the clause properly.

× I'm not looking forward to relocate anytime soon.

✓ I'm not looking forward to relocating anytime soon.

After the phrase 'looking forward to', the verb should be in the gerund (-ing) form, so 'relocate' should be 'relocating'.

× The place of origin is a famous place for people of all age.

✓ The place of origin is a famous place for people of all ages.

The phrase 'people of all age' is incorrect because 'age' should be plural 'ages' when referring to people of different age groups.

× There are a lot of activities one can engage on, for example, administration club in the community where we do.

✓ There are a lot of activities one can engage in, for example, the administration club in the community where we participate.

The correct preposition after 'engage' is 'in', not 'on'. Also, 'administration club' needs the definite article 'the' and the verb 'do' is vague; 'participate' is more appropriate here.