Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides some information but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear, concise description of your hometown, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I come from North Shinde, which is near Dhaka, the capital city. Although it is a small town, it is known for its beautiful scenery and historical sites like the old museum, which attract many visitors.

提案: Your answer shows your feelings but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you like the park.

例: I especially like the park near my hometown because it offers a peaceful environment. Whenever I visit, I go there to relax and enjoy the beautiful scenery, which helps me clear my mind.

提案: Your answer contains some good ideas but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Avoid unrelated or confusing statements like 'I always miss that type of movie.' Focus on clear, relevant details about your experience living there, and use linking words to organize your answer.

例: I have lived in my hometown since I was a child, so I have many fond memories of growing up there and spending time with my family and friends. These experiences make the place very special to me.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Make sure to complete your sentences and provide specific examples of facilities for young people. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it offers many educational opportunities and part-time job options. These facilities help young people develop their skills and gain work experience.

× My city is so much small but it's a nice place with their beautiful scenery and also there are famous place for visiting like old museum and also old.

✓ My city is very small but it's a nice place with beautiful scenery and also famous places to visit like the old museum and other old sites.

The phrase 'so much small' is incorrect; 'very small' is the proper adverb-adjective combination. 'Their beautiful scenery' is incorrect because 'their' does not refer to the city; 'beautiful scenery' without a possessive pronoun is correct. 'There are famous place' should be 'there are famous places' to match plural form. Also, 'for visiting like old museum and also old' is unclear and ungrammatical; it should be 'famous places to visit like the old museum and other old sites.' Suggestions: use 'very' with adjectives, ensure pronouns agree with nouns, and use plural forms when appropriate.

× My city is so much small but it's a nice place with their beautiful scenery and also there are famous place for visiting like old museum and also old.

✓ My city is very small but it's a nice place with beautiful scenery and also famous places to visit like the old museum and other old sites.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used to refer to 'my city,' which is singular. Instead, no possessive pronoun is needed before 'beautiful scenery.' This avoids confusion and maintains grammatical correctness.

× My city is so much small but it's a nice place with their beautiful scenery and also there are famous place for visiting like old museum and also old.

✓ My city is very small but it's a nice place with beautiful scenery and also famous places to visit like the old museum and other old sites.

The phrase 'there are famous place' is incorrect because 'place' is singular while 'there are' requires a plural noun. It should be 'famous places' to agree in number with the verb 'are.'

× When I go to my home, I always going there for relax and refrigeration.

✓ When I go home, I always go there to relax and refresh myself.

The phrase 'I always going' is incorrect; it should be 'I always go' to use the correct verb form after 'always.' Also, 'for relax and refrigeration' is incorrect; the correct infinitive form is 'to relax' and 'refresh myself' is a better choice than 'refrigeration' which is a noun related to cooling. Suggestions: use correct verb forms after adverbs and choose appropriate verbs for intended meaning.

× When I go to my home, I always going there for relax and refrigeration.

✓ When I go home, I always go there to relax and refresh myself.

The preposition 'to' before 'my home' is unnecessary; 'go home' is the correct expression. Also, 'for relax' should be 'to relax' to indicate purpose. Suggestions: omit unnecessary prepositions and use 'to' before verbs indicating purpose.

× My mind because of the scenery is so much beautiful also relaxable.

✓ My mind feels very beautiful and relaxed because of the scenery.

'So much beautiful' is incorrect; 'very beautiful' is correct. 'Relaxable' is not a standard adjective; 'relaxed' or 'relaxing' should be used. The sentence structure is awkward; rephrasing to 'My mind feels very beautiful and relaxed because of the scenery' improves clarity and grammar.

× My mind because of the scenery is so much beautiful also relaxable.

✓ My mind feels very beautiful and relaxed because of the scenery.

The original sentence has awkward word order and unclear meaning. The subject and predicate are not clearly connected. Reordering the sentence and using appropriate verbs clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× I have lived there since I was a child, so I have a lot of memory in my hometown growing up, spend time with my friends and parents.

✓ I have lived there since I was a child, so I have a lot of memories of growing up in my hometown and spending time with my friends and parents.

'Memory' should be plural 'memories' to indicate multiple recollections. 'Spend' should be 'spending' to match the gerund form after 'and.' The phrase 'a lot of memory in my hometown growing up' is awkward; rephrasing to 'memories of growing up in my hometown' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I have a lot of memory in my hometown growing up, spend time with my friends and parents.

✓ I have a lot of memories of growing up in my hometown and spending time with my friends and parents.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'memories of' is the correct collocation. Also, 'growing up' should be connected properly to the memories, and 'spend' should be 'spending' to maintain parallel structure.

× There are a lot of golden memories here. I always miss that type of movie.

✓ There are a lot of golden memories here. I always miss those kinds of moments.

'That type of movie' is unrelated to the context of memories and hometown. It seems the student meant to refer to 'those kinds of moments' or 'times.' Using 'that type of movie' is incorrect pronoun and noun choice here.

× There are a lot of golden memories here. I always miss that type of movie.

✓ There are a lot of golden memories here. I always miss those kinds of moments.

The second sentence is unrelated and confusing. It should connect logically to the first sentence about memories. Changing 'that type of movie' to 'those kinds of moments' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× Yes, my hometown is perfect for young people. There are so many facilities like. Educational platform and also job sector for part time job they are doing the.

✓ Yes, my hometown is perfect for young people. There are many facilities like educational platforms and job opportunities for part-time work.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. 'There are so many facilities like.' is incomplete. 'Educational platform' should be plural 'educational platforms.' 'Job sector for part time job they are doing the' is ungrammatical and unclear; rephrasing to 'job opportunities for part-time work' is correct. Suggestions: avoid sentence fragments and ensure complete, clear sentences.