Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'in the central of Vietnam' và sắp xếp câu hợp lý hơn để tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt không trôi chảy. Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, đúng ngữ pháp và tránh thừa từ.

例: My hometown is in central Vietnam, where the weather is extremely hot in summer and quite cold in winter.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời trở nên mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn. Hãy tránh lỗi như 'a transport facilities' (sai số nhiều), và sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý. Ngoài ra, nên cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về các phương tiện giao thông.

例: What I like most about my hometown is the transportation facilities. There are many bus stations, which make it easy for people to travel around the city.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng thì đúng cho câu trả lời (ví dụ thì hiện tại hoàn thành cho hành động bắt đầu trong quá khứ và còn tiếp diễn). Tránh lặp từ và nói dài dòng. Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt.

例: I have lived in my hometown since I was born, and I think I will continue living here for the rest of my life.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là chủ ngữ-động từ (ví dụ 'my hometown have' nên là 'my hometown has'). Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn về các dự án hoặc cơ sở vật chất dành cho giới trẻ.

例: Of course, my hometown is a great place for young people because it has many universities and schools. Additionally, there are various youth development projects that support students' growth.

× My hometown is located in the central of Vietnam, so the weather here is so extremely hot and summer and very cold in winter.

✓ My hometown is located in the center of Vietnam, so the weather here is extremely hot in summer and very cold in winter.

The phrase 'in the central of Vietnam' is incorrect; the correct preposition and noun form is 'in the center of Vietnam'. Also, 'so extremely hot and summer' is awkward; it should be 'extremely hot in summer'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× My hometown is located in the central of Vietnam, so the weather here is so extremely hot and summer and very cold in winter.

✓ My hometown is located in the center of Vietnam, so the weather here is extremely hot in summer and very cold in winter.

The phrase 'so extremely hot' is redundant; 'extremely hot' is sufficient. Also, 'and summer' is misplaced and should be 'in summer' to correctly describe the time period.

× The most thing that I like in my hometown is a transport facilities because it's important people can access to transportation everywhere because in my hometown I have many.

✓ The thing I like most in my hometown is the transport facilities because it's important that people can access transportation everywhere, and in my hometown, I have many.

'The most thing' is incorrect; it should be 'the thing I like most'. Also, 'a transport facilities' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'facilities'. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.

× The most thing that I like in my hometown is a transport facilities because it's important people can access to transportation everywhere because in my hometown I have many.

✓ The thing I like most in my hometown is the transport facilities because it's important that people can access transportation everywhere, and in my hometown, I have many.

The phrase 'access to transportation' is incorrect; 'access transportation' is the correct form. Also, the sentence is restructured for better flow and clarity.

× I post bus station.

✓ I have many bus stations.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It seems the student intended to say they have many bus stations. Correcting to 'I have many bus stations' makes the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× I live in my hometown since I was born, so I I think in the future I will be there in the near future I feel I think I will live in my hometown for the whole of my life.

✓ I have lived in my hometown since I was born, so I think I will live there for my whole life in the future.

The present tense 'I live' is incorrect with 'since I was born'; present perfect 'I have lived' is required. The sentence is also simplified and corrected for clarity and redundancy.

× I live in my hometown since I was born, so I I think in the future I will be there in the near future I feel I think I will live in my hometown for the whole of my life.

✓ I have lived in my hometown since I was born, so I think I will live there for my whole life in the future.

The phrase 'be there in the near future' is awkward and redundant with 'in the future'. Simplifying to 'live there for my whole life in the future' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Of course my hometown is a really good place for young people because in my hometown have many universities and many school for students to study there and also my city have many like projects.

✓ Of course, my hometown is a really good place for young people because it has many universities and many schools for students to study, and also my city has many projects.

The phrase 'in my hometown have many universities' lacks a subject; it should be 'it has many universities'. Also, 'many school' should be 'many schools' (plural). 'My city have' should be 'my city has' to agree with singular subject.