Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and direct. Instead of saying "Currently I live", you can say "My hometown is Hamilton, a small town in Canada." This is more concise and directly answers the question.

例: My hometown is Hamilton, a small town in Canada.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to be more specific and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, say "I like my hometown because it offers many facilities, such as healthcare and entertainment options, which make life comfortable."

例: I like my hometown because it offers many facilities, such as healthcare and entertainment options, which make life comfortable.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Focus on directly answering the question with clear sentences. For example, "I have lived in Hamilton my whole life since my family moved here from India when I was young."

例: I have lived in Hamilton my whole life since my family moved here from India when I was young.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and adding more specific details. For example, "Yes, my hometown is great for young people because it is convenient. For instance, public transportation is frequent, with buses arriving every two minutes, making it easy to get around."

例: Yes, my hometown is great for young people because it is convenient. For instance, public transportation is frequent, with buses arriving every two minutes, making it easy to get around.

× I think there are a lot of good things that are in my hometown, but one of the main reasons that I really like it would be that it has a lot of facilities such as health and entertainment, like affairs.

✓ I think there are a lot of good things in my hometown, but one of the main reasons I really like it is that it has many facilities such as health and entertainment services.

The phrase 'a lot of facilities such as health and entertainment, like affairs' is awkward and unclear. 'A lot of' is acceptable but 'like affairs' is incorrect and unclear. Replacing 'like affairs' with 'services' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'that are in my hometown' is redundant; 'in my hometown' suffices.

× And from what I remember, I have lived here for my whole life. Actually when I moved from India, it was the 1st hole we first moved into.

✓ And from what I remember, I have lived here my whole life. Actually, when I moved from India, it was the first home we moved into.

The phrase '1st hole' is a typo and should be 'first home'. Also, 'we first moved into' is redundant after 'it was the first home'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper past tense usage.

× First of all, it has public transportation that comes and goes regularly. For example, buses are come every two minutes.

✓ First of all, it has public transportation that comes and goes regularly. For example, buses come every two minutes.

The phrase 'buses are come' is incorrect. The verb 'come' should be used in simple present tense here as 'buses come every two minutes' to indicate a habitual action.