Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現を避けるために、より簡潔で正確な文を心がけましょう。例えば、「which is close to the sea」の後に「so I often visit the sea by bicycle with my friends」という部分は、2つの文に分けるか、接続詞を使って明確にすると良いです。

例: My hometown is Fujisawa city, which is near the sea. I often ride my bicycle there with my friends, and we have a lot of fun.

提案: 回答が断片的で文法的に不完全です。主語と述語を含む完全な文を作り、接続詞を使って文をつなげる練習をしましょう。また、具体的な理由や詳細を加えると良いです。

例: I like the people and the environment in my hometown because it is close to the sea, which makes the atmosphere very relaxing and beautiful.

提案: 文法が大きく間違っており、意味が伝わりにくいです。現在完了形を使い、簡潔で正確な文を作る練習をしましょう。また、不要な情報は避け、質問に直接答えることが重要です。

例: I have lived in Fujisawa city for 16 years. Before that, I lived in Kawasaki City.

提案: 文法と語順の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。接続詞を正しく使い、文を完成させる練習をしましょう。また、具体的な理由や例を加えると説得力が増します。

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it is close to the sea and has many clubs and activities, so young people can find everything they need.

× I like people and environment in the place.

✓ I like the people and the environment in the place.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'people' and 'environment' to specify the particular people and environment being referred to. In English, when talking about specific things, 'the' is used to indicate that specificity.

× Which is close to the sea.

✓ It is close to the sea.

The sentence fragment 'Which is close to the sea.' is incomplete and cannot stand alone. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rewritten as a complete sentence with a subject and verb.

× And I like the sea.

✓ I also like the sea.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally informal and can be avoided in formal speech. Using 'I also like the sea.' connects the idea smoothly and is grammatically correct.

× I leave 16 years this town.

✓ I have lived in this town for 16 years.

The verb 'leave' is incorrect here; the present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to express an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, the preposition 'in' is needed before 'this town', and 'for' is used to indicate duration.

× Liberty Inn, Kawasaki City before when I was a.

✓ I lived in Liberty Inn, Kawasaki City before.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear subject and verb. The corrected sentence provides a clear subject 'I' and verb 'lived' to express past residence. The phrase 'when I was a' is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× Yes because it close to the sea and it has many club so young people is.

✓ Yes, because it is close to the sea and it has many clubs, so young people can find everything.

The sentence has multiple errors: missing 'is' after 'it', 'club' should be plural 'clubs', and 'young people is' is incorrect subject-verb agreement. Also, 'can find everything' completes the meaning. Commas are added for clarity.