Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“that was a small county”应为“which is a small county”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: My hometown is Tai Chi, which is a small county located to the north of the Changjiang River.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，如“Ginkgo's”应为“ginkgos”，“Kinkos”应为“ginkgos”。句子结构有些重复，建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，同时丰富细节描述。

例: Although my hometown is smaller than big cities, it is famous for its ginkgos, which turn bright yellow in autumn. This beautiful natural scenery, along with the warm and friendly local customs, makes it very attractive to me.

提案: 句子结构不正确，时态使用错误，表达不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，正确使用时态，直接回答问题。

例: I have lived in my hometown for about seven years, since before I finished kindergarten.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“this is economy is not so developed at most of the current people”表达混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使逻辑更清晰，并注意语法准确。

例: Not really. On one hand, my hometown is a small county and does not offer enough job opportunities for young people. On the other hand, the economy is not very developed, so many young locals choose to move elsewhere to pursue a better life.

× My hometown is Tai Chi that was a small county located to the north of the Changjiang River.

✓ My hometown is Tai Chi, which was a small county located to the north of the Changjiang River.

这里需要使用关系代词'which'来引导定语从句，而不是'that'。另外，句中没有明显的单复数错误，但原句缺少逗号，影响句子结构清晰。

× Although my hometown is not as big as a large cities, it is renowned as hometown of Ginkgo's when the Kinkos turn yellow in autumn.

✓ Although my hometown is not as big as large cities, it is renowned as the hometown of Ginkgos when the Ginkgos turn yellow in autumn.

'a large cities'中'a'与复数'nities'不匹配，应去掉'a'。'Ginkgo's'错误使用了所有格，应为复数形式'Ginkgos'。另外，'Kinkos'应为'Ginkgos'。

× Although my hometown is not as big as a large cities, it is renowned as hometown of Ginkgo's when the Kinkos turn yellow in autumn.

✓ Although my hometown is not as big as large cities, it is renowned as the hometown of Ginkgos when the Ginkgos turn yellow in autumn.

'hometown'前缺少定冠词'the'，因为这里特指某个特定的家乡。

× It's beautiful natural scenery and warm local customs, really attractive to me.

✓ Its beautiful natural scenery and warm local customs are really attractive to me.

'It's'是'it is'的缩写，句中应使用物主代词'Its'表示'它的'。另外，句子缺少谓语动词，应补充'are'。

× Before I finish my kindergarten, I have been always living here, so in total about seven years.

✓ Before I finished kindergarten, I have always been living here, so in total about seven years.

时间状语'Before'后应使用过去时态'finished'。'have been always living'的副词位置不正确，应为'have always been living'。

× Before I finish my kindergarten, I have been always living here, so in total about seven years.

✓ Before I finished kindergarten, I have always been living here, so in total about seven years.

副词'always'应放在助动词'have'和'been'之间，正确顺序为'have always been'。

× Not really. I think on one hand it's just a small county and it cannot provide sufficient opportunities of job for young people.

✓ Not really. I think on one hand it's just a small county and it cannot provide sufficient job opportunities for young people.

'opportunities of job'搭配不当，应为'job opportunities'。

× On the other hand, this is economy is not so developed at most of the current people tend to pursue a good material life, so most of the young local people will choose to move.

✓ On the other hand, the economy is not so developed, and most of the current people tend to pursue a good material life, so most of the young local people will choose to move.

'this is economy'错误，应为'the economy'。句子缺少连接词'and'，导致结构混乱。