Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and fluent. Instead of 'I live in a small town in district Samurai. Its name is Bhatrana,' you could combine the information into one sentence and add a bit more detail to make it sound more natural.

例: My hometown is Bhatrana, a small town located in the Samurai district.

提案: Your answer provides good content but has some redundancy and minor grammar issues. Try to avoid repeating words like 'beautiful' and 'rainy rainy'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I like everything about my hometown because it is a quiet place surrounded by beautiful nature, and I really enjoy the close-knit community. However, one downside is the poor drainage system, which causes water to spread across the streets whenever it rains.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat unclear. Use the present perfect tense for actions continuing to the present, and organize your sentence clearly. Avoid awkward phrases like 'enjoying their my all the memories.'

例: I have lived there since my childhood with my parents and cousins, and I cherish all the memories I have made there.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating 'young people' multiple times and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it offers various facilities, including quality education and good hospitality, which help them build a better future.

× Whenever there is a rainy rainy weather, the water spread all around on the streets.

✓ Whenever there is rainy weather, the water spreads all around on the streets.

The phrase 'rainy rainy weather' is redundant; 'rainy weather' is sufficient. Also, 'water spread' should be 'water spreads' to agree with the singular subject 'water' in the present tense.

× I lived there since my childhood with my parents and with my cousins and I really love enjoying their my all the memories.

✓ I have lived there since my childhood with my parents and cousins, and I really love enjoying all my memories there.

The use of 'lived' is incorrect for an action continuing from the past to present; 'have lived' (present perfect) is appropriate. The phrase 'their my all the memories' is incorrect; it should be 'all my memories there' for clarity and correctness.