Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如缺少冠词“a”，且句子较长，缺少适当的连接词。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使表达更自然流畅。

例: My hometown is Suzhou, a city in Jiangsu province. It is famous for its beautiful classical gardens and attracts many tourists.

提案: 回答中出现了词汇错误（cartridge应为gardens），句子结构混乱，表达不够清晰。建议使用准确词汇，分句表达观点，并用连接词衔接。

例: I like my hometown because it has many classical gardens and a rich culture with a long history. Moreover, the humid climate suits me well.

提案: 回答基本清晰，但时态使用不够准确，且句子连接略显生硬。建议注意时态一致性，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I was born in Suzhou and lived there until I was 18. After finishing my exams, I went to Jinan to attend university.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，部分短语使用不当（如“near to Shanghai”应为“near Shanghai”），句子结构需调整以增强逻辑性。建议使用更自然的表达和连接词。

例: To some extent, Suzhou is a good place for young people because it has a high-tech industry and is near Shanghai, a modern city. However, life in Suzhou is quite comfortable, so people tend to relax more.

× My hometown is Suzhou, a city in Jiangsu province, and it is beautiful city with a lot of classical gardens and it is famous for its tourism.

✓ My hometown is Suzhou, a city in Jiangsu province, and it is a beautiful city with a lot of classical gardens and it is famous for its tourism.

此句中缺少冠词“a”，导致“beautiful city”表达不完整。英语中，单数可数名词前通常需要冠词。建议在“beautiful city”前加上冠词“a”。

× I like my hometown because it has a lot of classical cartridge and it is famous for its culture and long history, and the climate in Suzhou is very humid, so it is a benefit for me.

✓ I like my hometown because it has a lot of classical gardens and it is famous for its culture and long history, and the climate in Suzhou is very humid, so it is a benefit for me.

原句中“classical cartridge”应为“classical gardens”，这里是单词拼写错误，且“cartridge”是不可数名词且与语境不符，应改为复数形式“gardens”。建议使用正确的复数名词形式。

× I was born in Suzhou and had lived there until I was 18 years old. After that, I finished my examinations and I went to Jinan for my university life.

✓ I was born in Suzhou and lived there until I was 18 years old. After that, I finished my examinations and I went to Jinan for my university life.

“had lived”在此处不符合时间顺序，简单过去时“lived”更合适。过去完成时通常用于两个过去动作中较早发生的动作，但这里没有需要强调的先后顺序。建议使用简单过去时。

× To some extent it is since it has high technology industry in this city and it is near to Shanghai, which is a modern city in China.

✓ To some extent it is since it has a high technology industry in this city and it is near Shanghai, which is a modern city in China.

“high technology industry”前缺少冠词“a”，且“near to”应简化为“near”。英语中“near”后面直接接地点名词，不用“to”。建议加冠词并去掉“to”。

× But the life in Suzhou is very comfortable that we tend to relax in it.

✓ But the life in Suzhou is very comfortable, so we tend to relax there.

原句中“that”连接词使用不当，应使用“so”表示因果关系，且“relax in it”表达不自然，改为“relax there”更符合习惯用法。建议调整连接词并修改介词短语。