Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. However, you can improve by making the sentence more natural and fluent. For example, instead of 'which is located in Fatehgarh Sahib city of Punjab, India,' you can say 'a town in Fatehgarh Sahib district of Punjab, India.' This sounds more natural and precise.

例: I'm from Zahan, a town in Fatehgarh Sahib district of Punjab, India.

提案: Your answer has good points but lacks coherence and contains some grammatical errors. Use linking words properly and avoid incomplete sentences like 'These feature make living.' Also, try to be more specific and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say 'My hometown is attractive because it has several small gardens where people can relax and enjoy nature. Moreover, the convenient train and bus services make traveling to nearby cities easy, which makes living there both peaceful and practical.'

例: My hometown is attractive because it has several small gardens where people can relax and enjoy nature. Moreover, the convenient train and bus services make traveling to nearby cities easy, which makes living there both peaceful and practical.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Instead of 'because of neighborhood is very peace,' say 'because the neighbourhood is very peaceful.' Also, 'convenient for my daily activity' can be improved to 'convenient for my daily activities.' Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I have lived there for about five years now. It has been a great experience because the neighbourhood is very peaceful and convenient for my daily activities.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'these type of things are available.' Instead, say what facilities or opportunities are available for young people. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure are important.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers access to modern technology and facilities. For example, there are shops selling electronic gadgets and repair services for bikes, which are popular among the youth.

× These feature make living.

✓ These features make living.

The word 'feature' should be plural 'features' to agree with the plural subject 'These'. In English, plural subjects require plural nouns and verbs to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× It has been a great experience because of neighborhood is very peace and convenient for my daily activity.

✓ It has been a great experience because the neighborhood is very peaceful and convenient for my daily activities.

The word 'neighborhood' needs the definite article 'the' before it. 'Peace' is a noun, but the adjective 'peaceful' is needed to describe the neighborhood. 'Activity' should be plural 'activities' to match the context of daily routines.

× my hometown is good place for young people

✓ my hometown is a good place for young people

The phrase 'good place' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Also, 'for' is correctly used here to indicate suitability for young people.

× young people using these so many electronic gadgets and technique or software.

✓ young people use so many electronic gadgets and techniques or software.

The verb 'using' should be in the simple present tense 'use' to match the subject 'young people' and the habitual action described. Also, 'technique' should be plural 'techniques' to match 'gadgets' and 'software'.

× So near my hometown these type of things are available like if we talk about bikes.

✓ So near my hometown, these types of things are available, for example, if we talk about bikes.

The phrase 'these type' should be plural 'these types' to agree with the plural noun 'things'. Also, a comma is needed after 'hometown' for clarity. 'Like' is better replaced with 'for example' to introduce an example properly.