Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和拼写错误，表达不够自然流畅。建议注意动词时态和单复数形式，避免拼写错误，并简化句子结构，使表达更清晰。

例: My hometown is Puli, located in Nantong County, in the central region of Taiwan. It is a small town surrounded by many mountains, making it a cozy mountain town. It is famous for its beautiful landscapes and cool water. If you want to be close to nature, you should visit my hometown.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和不完整的句子，表达不够连贯。建议避免重复，使用连接词使句子更流畅，并补充完整感受表达。

例: When I talk about my hometown, what I like the most is its breathtaking scenery because it is surrounded by majestic mountains. Whenever I go out to the balcony, I enjoy the view of the sky and clouds blending perfectly with the mountain landscape, which looks almost like a beautiful painting. This peaceful view always makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: 时态使用不当，句子不完整，表达不够准确。建议使用正确的时态，补全句子，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: I lived there for about 14 years until I graduated from junior high school. Then, I moved to a different city because I wanted to access better educational resources and opportunities for my high school studies. This change really helped me improve my learning environment and focus more on my studies.

提案: 语法错误较多，表达不完整且不连贯。建议注意主谓一致，使用正确的词汇形式，补充完整句子，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: To be honest, I don't think my hometown is an ideal place for young people because the educational resources available to the public are quite limited. Additionally, the public transportation system is inconvenient, which makes commuting difficult. Furthermore, there are not enough job opportunities to support young people.

× My hometown is Puli Locate in Nantong County which is the central region of Taiwan.

✓ My hometown is Puli, located in Nantong County, which is the central region of Taiwan.

句中“Locate”应为过去分词“located”，用作定语修饰“Puli”，表示“位于”。

× Pulling is a small town surrounded by many mountains so many people often cozy a mountain town.

✓ Puli is a small town surrounded by many mountains, so many people often enjoy a mountain town.

“Pulling”应为地名“Puli”；“cozy a mountain town”表达不正确，应改为“enjoy a mountain town”或其他合适表达。

× It famous for its beautiful landscape and cooling water.

✓ It is famous for its beautiful landscape and cool water.

缺少系动词“is”；“cooling water”应为形容词“cool water”，表示“凉爽的水”。

× If we want to close to a nature you can visit my hometown.

✓ If you want to be close to nature, you can visit my hometown.

“want to close to”应为“want to be close to”，缺少系动词“be”；“a nature”错误，nature为不可数名词，不加冠词。

× When I talked about my hometown, what I like the most is is breathtaking scenery because it's surrounded by majestic mountains.

✓ When I talk about my hometown, what I like the most is the breathtaking scenery because it's surrounded by majestic mountains.

时态应为一般现在时“talk”，因为描述习惯性事实；“is is”重复，应删去一个“is”；“breathtaking scenery”前加定冠词“the”。

× Whenever I go out to the balcony, I can enjoy the view of the sky and clouds bleeding perfectly with the mountain landscape, which looks almost like a beautiful painting.

✓ Whenever I go out to the balcony, I can enjoy the view of the sky and clouds blending perfectly with the mountain landscape, which looks almost like a beautiful painting.

“bleeding”拼写错误，应为“blending”，意为“融合”。

× This peaceful view always makes me feel really.

✓ This peaceful view always makes me feel really relaxed.

句子不完整，“feel really”后缺少形容词，需补充“relaxed”等形容词使句子完整。

× I live there for about 14 years until I graduate from junior high school.

✓ I lived there for about 14 years until I graduated from junior high school.

描述过去经历，动词应使用过去时“lived”和“graduated”。

× Then I move to a different city because I want to see the better educational resources and opportunities for my high school studies.

✓ Then I moved to a different city because I wanted to access better educational resources and opportunities for my high school studies.

描述过去动作，动词应使用过去时“moved”和“wanted”；“see the better”表达不当，应为“access better”。

× This change really helps me improve my learning environment and focus more on my.

✓ This change really helped me improve my learning environment and focus more on my studies.

时态应为过去时“helped”；句尾不完整，缺少宾语“studies”。

× To be honest, I don't see my hometown is an ideal place for young people because the educational resource available to the public are quite limit.

✓ To be honest, I don't think my hometown is an ideal place for young people because the educational resources available to the public are quite limited.

“resource”应为复数“resources”；“are quite limit”应为“are quite limited”，形容词形式。

× Additionally, the public transportation system is inconvenient, which makes commuting difficult.

✓ Additionally, the public transportation system is inconvenient, which makes commuting difficult.

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× Furthermore, there are not enough job opportunities to make each other.

✓ Furthermore, there are not enough job opportunities to support each other.

“to make each other”表达不当，应为“to support each other”或其他合适表达。