Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“it's hardly for me to definite”应为“it's hard for me to define”。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，使表达更流畅。

例: My hometown is a bit hard to define because I was born in Xiaomi, a coastal city in Guangdong, but I grew up in Shenzhen. I have spent most of my childhood in Shenzhen, so I feel more connected to it.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“express graduated”应为“express gratitude”。建议直接表达喜欢的原因，并用具体例子支持，同时注意语法和词汇的准确性。

例: What I like most about my hometown is the people, including my parents, relatives, classmates, and teachers. They have all supported me a lot during my growth, and I am very grateful to them.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议直接回答时间长度，并用清晰的句子说明经历，避免复杂句式。

例: I have lived in Shenzhen for more than 10 years. I moved there when I was in primary school, and now I am studying in Guangzhou for university.

提案: 回答内容较好，但语法和表达不够准确，如“Shenzhen have a name”应为“Shenzhen is known as”。建议使用更准确的表达和连接词，使回答更自然流畅。

例: Yes, definitely. Shenzhen is known as the youngest city in China because it has only about 40 years of history since becoming a special economic zone. It offers many job opportunities for young people.

× Well, it's hardly for me to definite where is my hometown because I born in Xiaomi, which is a coastal city located in Guangdong.

✓ Well, it's hard for me to define where my hometown is because I was born in Xiaomi, which is a coastal city located in Guangdong.

句子结构不正确，'hardly' 应为 'hard'，'definite' 应为动词 'define'，且疑问句 'where is my hometown' 应改为陈述句 'where my hometown is'。此外，'I born' 缺少助动词，应为 'I was born'。

× Well, it's hardly for me to definite where is my hometown because I born in Xiaomi, which is a coastal city located in Guangdong.

✓ Well, it's hard for me to define where my hometown is because I was born in Xiaomi, which is a coastal city located in Guangdong.

动词 'born' 需要过去时态助动词 'was'，表示过去发生的动作。

× But my parents let me grow up in Shenzhen, so I spend a lot of times in there in Shenzhen and I think I feel more emotions.

✓ But my parents let me grow up in Shenzhen, so I spend a lot of time there in Shenzhen and I think I feel more emotions.

'a lot of times' 应为 'a lot of time'，表示大量时间；'in there' 应改为 'there'，因为 'there' 本身表示地点，不需要介词。

× so I spend a lot of times in there in Shenzhen and I think I feel more emotions.

✓ so I spend a lot of time there in Shenzhen and I think I feel more emotions.

'times' 用于表示次数，'time' 用于表示时间长度，此处应使用 'time'。

× Both of them gave me lots of support in the road to growth and I express graduated to them.

✓ Both of them gave me lots of support on the road to growth and I expressed gratitude to them.

'in the road' 应为 'on the road'，介词使用错误；'express graduated' 词语搭配错误，应为 'expressed gratitude'。

× Both of them gave me lots of support in the road to growth and I express graduated to them.

✓ Both of them gave me lots of support on the road to growth and I expressed gratitude to them.

前半句为过去时，后半句 'express' 应改为过去时 'expressed'，时态不一致。

× More than 10 years because I moved to Shenzhen when I in primary school and now I'm leaving Guangzhou because I'm studying in there.

✓ More than 10 years because I moved to Shenzhen when I was in primary school and now I'm living in Guangzhou because I'm studying there.

'I in primary school' 缺少动词，应为 'I was in primary school'；'I'm leaving Guangzhou' 表达错误，应为 'I'm living in Guangzhou'；'studying in there' 介词使用错误，应为 'studying there'。

× now I'm leaving Guangzhou because I'm studying in there.

✓ now I'm living in Guangzhou because I'm studying there.

'in there' 介词使用错误，'there' 本身表示地点，不需要 'in'。

× So the space between the primary schools to the universities is been 10 years.

✓ So the time between primary school and university has been 10 years.

'is been' 是错误的时态表达，应使用现在完成时 'has been'；'space between the primary schools to the universities' 结构不正确，应为 'time between primary school and university'。

× So the space between the primary schools to the universities is been 10 years.

✓ So the time between primary school and university has been 10 years.

'primary schools' 和 'universities' 应改为单数形式 'primary school' 和 'university'，表示一般概念。

× Yes, of course, because Shenzhen have a name called the youngest city in China, because it only has 40 years history from the opening development area to now and it is available for young people to work in there.

✓ Yes, of course, because Shenzhen has a name called the youngest city in China, as it only has 40 years of history from the opening of the development area to now and it is available for young people to work there.

主谓不一致，'Shenzhen have' 应为 'Shenzhen has'；'40 years history' 应为 '40 years of history'；'work in there' 介词错误，应为 'work there'。

× it is available for young people to work in there.

✓ it is available for young people to work there.

'work in there' 中 'in' 多余，'work there' 更符合英语习惯。