Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và chính xác về vị trí quê hương. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và sai ngữ pháp. Hãy mô tả rõ ràng quê hương của bạn nằm ở đâu và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: My hometown is in the central region of Vietnam. It is a beautiful place with many natural landscapes and a rich culture.

提案: Bạn nên bắt đầu câu trả lời bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sử dụng các liên từ để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về những điều bạn thích ở quê hương.

例: I like the people in my hometown because they are very friendly and supportive. For example, they always help each other during difficult times, which creates a strong sense of community.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và không trả lời đúng câu hỏi. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp về khoảng thời gian bạn đã sống ở đó, sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc thì quá khứ phù hợp.

例: I have lived in my hometown for about 20 years since I was born.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp. Hãy cung cấp lý do cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it has many parks and entertainment centers where they can relax and have fun.

× My hometown Italy and Peruvian with it located in central of Vietnam.

✓ My hometown is Italy and Peru, and it is located in the central part of Vietnam.

The original sentence lacks a verb and proper conjunctions, making it unclear. Adding 'is' and 'and' clarifies the meaning, and 'central of Vietnam' should be 'central part of Vietnam' for correct preposition use.

× It's very beautiful, wonderful and beautiful.

✓ It's very beautiful and wonderful.

The word 'beautiful' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the repetition improves clarity and style.

× A lot of people in here very much because they are very intelligent, friendly and supportive.

✓ I like a lot of people here because they are very intelligent, friendly, and supportive.

The phrase 'in here very much' is incorrect. 'Here' is sufficient without 'in', and 'very much' should be placed after the verb 'like' to express preference.

× I have lived there when I walked the time and now I am living in the Uncle Vin.

✓ I have lived there since I was young, and now I am living with Uncle Vin.

The phrase 'when I walked the time' is unclear and incorrect. 'Since I was young' is a proper expression. Also, 'in the Uncle Vin' should be 'with Uncle Vin' to indicate living with someone.

× Says my hometown is a good place for young people because they are proving have many wonderful place for young people.

✓ I think my hometown is a good place for young people because it has many wonderful places for them.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Says' is unnecessary, and 'they are proving have' is incorrect. Replacing with 'I think' and 'it has' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'many'.