Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较简短且有犹豫词“Umm”，建议开头直接回答问题，避免使用填充词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: My hometown is Hangzhou, which is the capital city of Zhejiang province.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然，如'relax'应为'relaxed'，'desert of delicious'表达错误。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并用更准确的词汇描述。

例: I like almost everything about my hometown, especially its relaxed atmosphere and pleasant climate. However, what attracts me the most is the delicious local cuisine, which I find very tasty despite some negative opinions online.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如'I've gone'应为'I went'，'some special connecting'应为'special connection'。建议简洁表达，避免重复连词，使用正确时态和词汇。

例: I have lived in Hangzhou for almost 22 years. Although I went to Beijing for university, I always returned home during holidays because I have a special connection with my hometown.

提案: 回答中语法错误明显，如'Hangzhou have many politics'应为'Hangzhou has many policies'。建议使用正确的词汇和语法，详细说明政策内容，使回答更具体。

例: Yes, absolutely. Hangzhou has many policies that support young people, especially university graduates, to start their careers successfully.

× Almost everything, the relax, relaxing atmosphere, the climate, the weather.

✓ Almost everything: the relaxed, relaxing atmosphere, the climate, the weather.

这里'relax'用作形容词时应为'relaxed'，表示放松的状态。'relax'是动词，不能直接用作形容词。应使用'relaxed'来修饰'atmosphere'。

× Although many people online say Hangzhou is desert of delicious but I think the cuisine in Hangzhou really tasty.

✓ Although many people online say Hangzhou is a desert of delicious food, I think the cuisine in Hangzhou is really tasty.

'desert of delicious'表达不正确，应该是'a desert of delicious food'，表示“美食的沙漠”。另外，句中缺少冠词'a'，且'tasty'前应加系动词'is'。

× I've been living there in almost 22 years.

✓ I've been living there for almost 22 years.

表示时间段应使用介词'for'，而不是'in'。'in'用于表示具体时间点，'for'用于表示持续时间。

× Although I've gone to Beijing for my university study, but I came back to Hangzhou every holiday because I really have some special connecting with my country, with my hometown.

✓ Although I've gone to Beijing for my university study, I came back to Hangzhou every holiday because I really have some special connection with my country, with my hometown.

'Although'和'but'不能同时使用，二者都表示转折，使用其中一个即可。

× Hangzhou have many politics for young people to start their career, especially for university graduate.

✓ Hangzhou has many policies for young people to start their careers, especially for university graduates.

主语'Hangzhou'是第三人称单数，谓语动词应为'has'。'politics'指政治学，语境应为'policies'（政策）。'career'应为复数'careers'，'graduate'应为复数'graduates'。