Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'the central of Korea' 대신 'the capital of South Korea'를 사용하고, 'I lived' 대신 'I have lived'를 사용하여 현재까지의 상태를 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: My hometown is Seoul, the capital of South Korea. I have lived there since I was born.

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 길어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 'The thing I like most is...'으로 시작하고, 구체적인 예시를 연결어로 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: The thing I like most about my hometown is the variety of entertainment options. For instance, there are many restaurants, cafes, and cinemas where I can enjoy movies.

提案: 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'I actually born' 대신 'I was actually born'를 사용하고, 미래 의도를 표현할 때는 'I would live' 대신 'I will live' 또는 'I want to live'를 사용하는 것이 자연스럽습니다.

例: I have lived in Seoul since I was born. I was actually born there, so I want to live in Seoul forever.

提案: 답변이 비교적 잘 구성되어 있으나, 'some countryside' 대신 'the countryside'를 사용하고, 연결어 'moreover' 대신 'in addition' 또는 'furthermore'를 사용하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다.

例: Yes, it's definitely a good place for young people because there are many places to enjoy, such as shopping malls and restaurants. In addition, Seoul offers more job opportunities than the countryside.

× My hometown is Seoul, which is the central of Korea.

✓ My hometown is Seoul, which is the center of Korea.

'Central' is an adjective, but here a noun is needed to describe Seoul's position. 'Center' is the correct noun form to indicate the central place. 'The central' is incorrect because 'central' cannot be used as a noun in this context.

× I lived in Seoul since I was born.

✓ I have lived in Seoul since I was born.

The sentence uses 'since' which requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Lived' is simple past and does not fit with 'since'.

× The most thing that I like is there are lots of things I can enjoy.

✓ The main thing that I like is that there are lots of things I can enjoy.

'The most thing' is incorrect; 'the most' is used with plural or uncountable nouns. 'The main thing' or 'the thing I like most' is correct. Also, 'is there are' needs 'that' to connect the clauses properly.

× For example, there are lots of restaurants, lots of cafes and also there are some cinemas that I can enjoy some movies.

✓ For example, there are lots of restaurants, lots of cafes, and also some cinemas where I can enjoy movies.

The phrase 'that I can enjoy some movies' is awkward. 'Where I can enjoy movies' is more natural. Also, 'some movies' is better as 'movies' in general. Added commas for clarity.

× I have lived in Seoul since I was born. I actually born in Seoul, so I would live in Seoul forever.

✓ I have lived in Seoul since I was born. I was actually born in Seoul, so I will live in Seoul forever.

'I actually born' is missing the auxiliary verb 'was' for past tense passive voice. 'Would live' is incorrect for expressing future intention; 'will live' is appropriate.

× Yes, it's definitely a good place for young people because there are lots of things that young people can enjoy, such as shopping malls or restaurants, and moreover, there are more job opportunities in Seoul than some countryside.

✓ Yes, it's definitely a good place for young people because there are lots of things that young people can enjoy, such as shopping malls and restaurants, and moreover, there are more job opportunities in Seoul than in the countryside.

Use 'and' instead of 'or' when listing multiple examples. Also, 'some countryside' is incorrect; 'the countryside' is the correct phrase. Added 'in' before 'the countryside' for correct preposition usage.