Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, ensure correct sentence structure and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I live in Sarhan, a city in southern India known for its rich history. It has many Sikh shrines and significant landmarks that attract visitors.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better linking words. Avoid starting sentences with 'And' and try to combine ideas smoothly for better flow.

例: I like my hometown because the people have a strong sense of community. Moreover, it offers many amenities such as quality educational institutions, well-equipped hospitals, and a reliable transportation system with buses available throughout the day.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat unclear. Use the correct tense and structure to express duration clearly. Also, try to add a supporting detail to enrich your response.

例: I have lived in my hometown since I was born, and I feel deeply connected to its charm and culture.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes. Make sure to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, provide specific examples to support your points.

例: Yes, definitely. My hometown offers many opportunities for young people, including good educational institutions where they can study and improve their job prospects. Additionally, the well-equipped hospitals provide excellent healthcare services.

× My city is very famous for its historical background as it there has a lot of Sikh, Sikh shrines as well as some landmarks like which have its own significance.

✓ My city is very famous for its historical background as there are a lot of Sikh shrines as well as some landmarks which have their own significance.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it there has' which is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is 'there are' to indicate the existence of multiple shrines and landmarks. Also, 'Sikh' was repeated unnecessarily and 'which have its own significance' should be 'which have their own significance' to agree with the plural subject 'landmarks'. This correction follows the 'There be issue' and 'Singular and plural issue' grammar types.

× a lot of amenities are available from educational institute to good hospitals and better transportation system.

✓ a lot of amenities are available from educational institutes to good hospitals and a better transportation system.

The phrase 'from educational institute to good hospitals and better transportation system' lacks articles and plural forms. 'Educational institute' should be plural 'educational institutes' to match 'a lot of amenities'. Also, 'better transportation system' needs the article 'a' before it. This is an issue of incorrect use of prepositions and articles.

× And it is very reliable to take buses at any time of the day.

✓ And it is very convenient to take buses at any time of the day.

The word 'reliable' is incorrectly used here to describe the ease of taking buses. The correct adjective is 'convenient'. This is an issue of incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, but since 'reliable' is an adjective misapplied, it fits better under incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs.

× I am living in my hometown since my birth and I appreciate its charm that I am very connected to my hometown.

✓ I have been living in my hometown since my birth and I appreciate its charm; I am very connected to my hometown.

The present continuous tense 'I am living' is incorrect with 'since my birth' which requires present perfect continuous tense 'I have been living'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by separating the ideas with a semicolon. This is a present tense issue.

× Yes definitely as it serves a lot of options and provides good opportunity for people such as there are good educational institute where one can study and get better options for job.

✓ Yes, definitely, as it offers a lot of options and provides good opportunities for people, such as good educational institutes where one can study and get better options for jobs.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'educational institute' should be plural 'educational institutes', 'good opportunity' should be plural 'good opportunities', and 'job' should be plural 'jobs' to match 'options'. Also, 'serves a lot of options' is better expressed as 'offers a lot of options'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Secondly health facilities are quite good and as the hospitals are well equipped so one can get a.

✓ Secondly, health facilities are quite good, and as the hospitals are well equipped, one can get good medical care.

The original sentence is incomplete and has poor structure. It ends abruptly with 'so one can get a.' The corrected sentence completes the thought and improves sentence flow by adding commas and completing the idea. This is a sentence structure error.