Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural and effective by combining the information into one coherent sentence and avoiding redundancy. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My hometown, Jalili, is located in Ludhiana district, which is well known for its thriving textile industries.

提案: Your answer covers many points but is somewhat repetitive and lacks linking words to make it coherent. Try to be more concise and use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to list specific opportunities clearly.

例: I like my hometown because it offers many opportunities, such as jobs, healthcare, education, and grocery shops, which benefit all the villagers.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and link your ideas more naturally. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question.

例: I have lived in my hometown since I was born. I enjoy living there because it is a calm and relaxing place, and I feel proud to be from there.

提案: Your answer has good content but is quite long and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words like 'for example' and correct verb forms. Also, try to be more concise and clear in your explanation.

例: Yes, my hometown is great for young people because it offers many facilities. For example, there is a large playground where youngsters can play football and kabaddi, which helps improve their physical and mental health.

× I'm very happy that I born in this hometown.

✓ I'm very happy that I was born in this hometown.

The verb 'born' is the past participle and needs an auxiliary verb 'was' to form the passive voice in past tense. The correct form is 'was born' to indicate the event of birth.

× my hometown provide all kind of facilities

✓ my hometown provides all kinds of facilities

The subject 'my hometown' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' to agree in number. Also, 'all kind' should be pluralized to 'all kinds' to correctly express variety.

× there is a big huge playground at the youngsters can go to play football

✓ there is a big huge playground where the youngsters can go to play football

The preposition 'at' is incorrect here; 'where' is the correct relative adverb to indicate the place where youngsters can play.

× kabaddi at thought of outdoors activities which is very beneficial for them

✓ kabaddi and other outdoor activities which are very beneficial for them

The phrase 'at thought of' is incorrect. The correct conjunction is 'and' to connect activities, and 'outdoors' should be 'outdoor' as an adjective. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'activities'.