Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변에서 'Changzhou'는 중국에 있는 도시명으로, 한국의 도시명을 정확히 말하는 것이 중요합니다. 또한, 문장 구조가 다소 어색하고 중복된 표현('It's it has')이 있습니다. 자연스럽고 명확한 문장 구성을 연습하세요.

例: My hometown is Changwon in South Korea. It has beautiful scenery that helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: 중복된 단어('I'd I'd')와 어색한 전치사 사용('like to the')가 있습니다. 또한, 답변이 조금 더 구체적이고 자연스럽게 연결되도록 연습하세요.

例: I really enjoy the summer scenery in my hometown because there are many trees with leaves that have a beautiful shade of green, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: 시제 사용이 부적절하고 문장이 불완전합니다. 'I had to leave in my hometown' 대신 'I lived in my hometown'이 적절하며, 문장을 완성하여 명확하게 표현하세요.

例: I lived in my hometown for about 20 years. After that, I moved to Seoul to continue my studies.

提案: 답변이 너무 간단하고 반복적입니다. 좀 더 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 만드세요.

例: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it offers beautiful natural scenery and many outdoor activities that help them relax and enjoy their free time.

× My hometown is Changzhou in South Korea.

✓ My hometown is Changzhou in South Korea.

No correction needed for this sentence.

× It's it has a beautiful scenery.

✓ It has beautiful scenery.

The phrase 'a beautiful scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article 'a'. Also, the repetition 'It's it' is redundant and should be corrected to 'It has'.

× It makes me relax and clear my mind.

✓ It makes me relax and clear my mind.

No correction needed for this sentence.

× I'd I'd like to the summer scenery on my hometown.

✓ I'd like the summer scenery in my hometown.

The phrase 'I'd I'd' is a repetition error and should be 'I'd'. The preposition 'on' is incorrect for 'hometown'; 'in' is the correct preposition. Also, 'like to the summer scenery' is incorrect; it should be 'like the summer scenery'.

× There are many trees and their leaves have a beautiful shade of green.

✓ There are many trees, and their leaves have a beautiful shade of green.

No major grammar error, but adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence clarity.

× It helps me relax and clear my mind.

✓ It helps me relax and clear my mind.

No correction needed for this sentence.

× I had to leave in my hometown for about 20 years.

✓ I have lived in my hometown for about 20 years.

The phrase 'had to leave in my hometown' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'I have lived in my hometown'. Also, 'leave in' is incorrect; 'live in' is correct. The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate for an action continuing to the present.

× After that I been living in Seoul because I have to go to my.

✓ After that, I have been living in Seoul because I have to go to my school.

The phrase 'I been living' is missing the auxiliary verb 'have' for present perfect continuous tense. Also, the sentence is incomplete; 'go to my' should be completed, likely 'go to my school' or similar.

× Yes, of course. It has a beautiful scenery.

✓ Yes, of course. It has beautiful scenery.

As before, 'scenery' is uncountable and does not take the article 'a'.

× So it makes the young people relax.

✓ So it helps young people relax.

The phrase 'makes the young people relax' is grammatically acceptable but 'helps young people relax' is more natural. Also, 'the young people' is less common than 'young people' in general statements.