Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'I were' nên là 'I was', 'natural' nên là 'nature', và câu cuối không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I was born and raised in Sabah, which is located in the northern part of Vietnam. It is a peaceful and tranquil place surrounded by nature, such as mountains and rivers. I really enjoy living there because it offers a calm environment away from the busy city life.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'How I like in my hometown' không đúng cấu trúc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về điểm bạn thích, đồng thời tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: I like my hometown because it is famous for its beautiful landscapes, especially the stunning Bang Mountain. The natural scenery attracts many visitors and makes living there enjoyable.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt nhưng câu 'for about 18 years old' không chính xác, nên nói 'for about 18 years'. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể.

例: I have lived there for about 18 years, and during this time, I have grown very fond of the community and the local environment because of its friendly people and beautiful nature.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác, cấu trúc câu đơn giản và cung cấp các ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ quan điểm của mình.

例: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it has many good schools, modern hospitals, and shopping centers. These facilities provide excellent educational and recreational opportunities for the youth.

× Well I were born and raised in Sabah, located in northern part of Vietnam.

✓ Well I was born and raised in Sabah, located in the northern part of Vietnam.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for the first person singular subject 'I' in the past tense. The correct past tense form is 'was'. Also, 'northern part' requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× For the most part it's peaceful and tranquil with a close connection to natural such as mountains and river.

✓ For the most part, it's peaceful and tranquil with a close connection to nature such as mountains and rivers.

The word 'natural' is an adjective and should be replaced with the noun 'nature' to fit the context. Also, 'river' should be plural 'rivers' to match 'mountains' and the general meaning.

× So I really enjoy living there because they suffer calm environment away for.

✓ So I really enjoy living there because it offers a calm environment away from the city.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect here; it should be 'it' referring to the hometown. The verb 'suffer' is misused; 'offers' is appropriate. Also, 'away for' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'away from'.

× How I like in my hometown because my hometown has gained A reputation for its beautiful landscape, especially fancy Bang Mountain.

✓ I like my hometown because it has gained a reputation for its beautiful landscape, especially the famous Bang Mountain.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'How I like in my hometown' is ungrammatical. It should be 'I like my hometown'. 'A' should be lowercase. 'Fancy' is not appropriate here; 'famous' fits better.

× Well, I've lived there for about 18 years old and I have grown very fond of the community and the local environment.

✓ Well, I've lived there for about 18 years and I have grown very fond of the community and the local environment.

The phrase '18 years old' is incorrect when used with 'for'. '18 years' is correct to indicate duration.

× Ah yes, my hometown is definitely a great place for young people because they suffer a wide range of fat cities such as good school, modern hospital and less shopping Center for example the school province silent educational opportunities while commercial and.

✓ Ah yes, my hometown is definitely a great place for young people because it offers a wide range of facilities such as good schools, modern hospitals, and shopping centers. For example, the schools provide excellent educational opportunities while commercial areas are well developed.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect; 'it' should refer to the hometown. 'Suffer' is misused; 'offers' is correct. 'Fat cities' is incorrect; 'facilities' is appropriate. 'Good school' and 'modern hospital' should be plural. 'Less shopping Center' is incorrect; 'shopping centers' is correct. The sentence is incomplete and unclear, so it has been restructured for clarity.